Stay with me for a while
Work hard and make me smile
Keep the daylight in my eyes
Don't let them close
Don't let me despise
Make me promise things I cannot
Take my hand although it has had enough
Always listen
Make a day seem like an eternity
And in that way it will remain a certainty
Let go the tears you try
Open your eyes
Open them wide
Stay for more than laughter and smiles
Hold me although you never let go
Always missing
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I definitely enjoyed this one, Anita. You used something that you usually don't. Simplicity. And it captured the moment and the concept perfectly. Brilliant piece.
Hope all is well.
-Taylor
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Very effective, Lu. The emotion is right at the surface, which is how I like 'em. As Tay said, simple, but deceptively so. There's more here than meets the eye. Wonderful...
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Agreed, this is wonderful. The aforementioned simplicity really works in this poem's favor; it comes across as an incredibly honest confession. Great poem Lu!
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