[freakazoid]

You were big,
I was small,
I'd play n dig,
While you were at the mall

Did you love me?
I didnt know it,
Love was the key,
But you didnt show it

I love you though,
And I'll never stop,
But, Oh i need you so,
Your love to pull me to the top

For I'm down at the bottom,
Almost considered dead,
Like the leaves in Autumn,
My body feels like lead

Causing me to fall fast,
And hard to ground,
Feeling relief at last,
Only when my heart no longer pounds

But your love can save me
If only i knew you cared
Let's get together shall we?
So that both our lives are spared

[Lubesh]

I liked that, heartfelt plea, I have asuggetsion for one of your lines to keep the flow from becoming straggly;

Causing me to fall down fast
And hard to the ground
Feeling relief at last
But my heart will no longer pound

[BookWhale***]

It's a pretty good poem... You need to work on grammer a little bit...Maybe get some suspence in your writing? Just a sugestion...

Keep writing!

[rjd_39]

i agree with bookwhale. V sad. cn feel the sadness, ALWAYS! ^^

[RENA HANDS]

I love you though,
And I'll never stop,
But, Oh i need you so,
Your love to pull me to the top

But your love can save me
If only i knew you cared
Let's get together shall we?
So that both our lives are spared

Save for the two errors with "I' this poem was most sincere, genuine and straightforward. The rhythm was a bit knotty still the imagery was obvious and exact. Again, a authentic submission.

Question were we the readers to feel "little, ignored" as you felt then? Is that why you did not capitalize the "I?" If so then I have blundered with my correction.