MemberPanel

ourSponsors

Google
   


Notices


Reply
 
LinkBack Thread Tools Rate Thread Display Modes
  #1 (permalink)  
Old 12-06-2005, 04:14 AM
Valued Reader
 
Join Date: Apr 2005
Location: Canada
Posts: 109
Total Points: 278.00
freakazoid is a regular around herefreakazoid is a regular around herefreakazoid is a regular around here
Send a message via MSN to freakazoid Send a message via Yahoo to freakazoid
I Love You

I'm sitting here in class
Being bored and drinking coffee
My mind begins to wander
And I think about you and me

I think about you and me
And I feel a little sad
We've been fighting for days
And I feel really bad

I feel really bad
Because I didn't say "I love you"
Although I've really wanted to
I want it to be special too

I want it to be special
Just like our relationship is
I just want to make sure
It won't fade away and fiz

It won't fade away and fiz
Because I think I've finally realized that
I love you more than many things
So please let's end this spat
__________________
~Freak~
Reply With Quote
Sponsored Links
  #2 (permalink)  
Old 16-08-2007, 06:03 AM
RENA HANDS's Avatar
SM 's Roving Reviewer - Want a review then PM me.
Photobucket
 
Join Date: Dec 2006
Posts: 2,179
Total Points: 14,087.92
RENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary memberRENA HANDS is an Honorary member
Thumbs up Re: I Love You

This version of using the last line to start a first of a new it was very interesting.

I disagree with this stanza for you did not use the full original quote...

Quote:
I feel really bad
Because I didn't say "I love you"
Although I've really wanted to
I want it to be special too
Quote:
I want it to be special
Just like our relationship is
I just want to make sure
It won't fade away and fiz
For me I will state that the rhythm isa bit awkward, but necessary for this form of poetry you have posted. Bravo.
__________________
Right, I'll keep to the present but just take a glance at the past. Damn, is this poetry?


Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Tags
None



Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes Rate This Thread
Rate This Thread:

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On


All times are GMT +9. The time now is 09:18 AM. vBulletin Skin by ForumMonkeys. Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.7.1
Copyright ©2000 - 2009, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Search Engine Friendly URLs by vBSEO 3.1.0 ©2007, Crawlability, Inc.
Advertisement System V2.1 By   Branden
Copyright © 1999 - 2008, StoriesMania.Net


Love Systems | The Attraction Forums | Savoy