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Old 08-12-2005, 09:15 AM
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[PICK] Seasons End

A fragile flower bends in the breeze
Its petals drop one by one with such ease
They lay on the ground and then blow away
The buds that had blossomed are gone in one day

That same fragile flower echoes our love
The seed we planted was nurtured above
We once blossomed but have now slowly faded
Our strong passionate vines have since become jaded
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Old 08-12-2005, 10:26 AM
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Re: Seasons End

That was so beautiful, and sad, lubesh.
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Beautiful is a good word for it. Awesome emotions. good work.
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Re: Seasons End

hmm I love this poem. very heartfelt
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

Love the rhymes. It is sad, bittersweet and a beautiful piece.
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

it is an enjoyable read but then again everything you wirte is enjoyable to read
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

Thank you both.
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

Lubesh, you've given me so many comments, and I apologize I have not returned the favor.
This is a beautiful work, though I'm far from a poet, I truly appreciate the sentiment, it's funny how what starts out so enthusiastic and heartfelt, often begins to fade, turning flowers into thorns.
Often its true that the ones we love are the ones we hurt the most, and you've captured that sentiment perfectly here. Very good job, and perfect poem!
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

Oh, my - an early one of yours, and wonderful to boot. Shame on me for missing it. "Damned fine," Lu...
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

This even older than the one I just replied to... Loved the rhymes, and the whole concept the poem brought forth. Nice, Lu. Very nice.
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Re: [PICK] Seasons End

Thanks again.
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Once more you’ve Brilliantly Illustrated a balance of Beauty and Ugliness.

Finding love and its Loss.

The Youthfulness of the Heart and the Aged Wisdom of the Mind…
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Thank you dear friend.
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