[Lubesh]

How can I say
I live without you
Everywhere I go
You're there
Your face
Your stare

Is there a way
To be without you
Every smile of doubt
In windows
In mirrors
In places

I lost my way
Without you
Now I've found the path
Each step
Each corner
Each turn

You had a way
About you
So why wouldn't you
Be there
To watch
To care

I smile as I worry
I have lost you
I hurriedly search
And hear
And see
You everywhere

[Storiesmaniac]

Beautiful and deep anita, not going to lie i dont like it as much as some of your other work, but that does not take away from this one. It still hit me. And i still enjoyed it. Good work

Question though "You're face, You're stare" Did you mean your?

[RENA HANDS]

An extremely heartfelt, earnest submission.

I too agree that...

You're face

Your face

and

You're stare

Your stare

At what time did u post this? lol A tease, I rag out of friendship.

[Lubesh]

Originally Posted by storiesmaniac

Beautiful and deep anita, not going to lie i dont like it as much as some of your other work, but that does not take away from this one. It still hit me. And i still enjoyed it. Good work

Question though "You're face, You're stare" Did you mean your?

No....lol

Yes i did thanks timbo...have a raging flu and was up all night hence its crappiness and not thinking...paracetamol does that u know......what do u take for ur 'dont's lol

[Lubesh]

And yes rena I was dead on my feet.lol

[loosygoosy007]

That was beautiful. I loved the structure, and I enjoyed every stanza. So meaningful in so little words. Excellent.

[SeaN]

Nice Lu- very heartfelt despite the basic structure. The form itself seems to reflect the mood; plodding through unanswered questions. The 'say-way-worry' rhyme was effective.

I like it

[Storiesmaniac]

HAhahahaha it's what i dont take thats the problem anita!

[osofoaddo]

A beautiful writing ... And it conveys so much passion .. Thank you for sharing

[Phonoho]

Somehow this reminds me of a song by Edith Pia. Remember the one in the film Saving Private Ryan? This leaves me breathless.

[Lubesh]

no...will goggle and see or hear. but thanks for that it was just last quck type this morning .was dragged from the lappy screaming lol

I have seen Private Ryan too....mmm will check it.

Thank you all forur comments also.