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26-07-2007, 06:26 AM
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Desperate
What kind of tears are these,
so hot and full of wonder? I feel as though my heart will burst with the agony of the rising, crushing desire, this fire that pours from my eyes like blood from a wound, stinging and screaming . . . There are no words to sing that could unfold the darkest corners of this voracious soul. 
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26-07-2007, 09:16 AM
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Re: Desperate
Very nice, Eadha. I loved your description and word choice on this. The flow was great, and it was a great show of emotion.
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26-07-2007, 09:24 AM
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Re: Desperate
Nice short burst. Very intense.
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26-07-2007, 01:00 PM
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Re: Desperate
Wow !!!!!... this is heavy and very thought provoking ... I read it again and agin just to get the feeling ... Very nice and creative...thank you for posting.
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09-08-2007, 05:32 AM
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Re: Desperate
What a most successful example of forlorn emotion. The rhythm hassle-free not unwieldy at all.
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Right, I'll keep to the present but just take a glance at the past. Damn, is this poetry?
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