[Corneac]

WARNING: Bad words


Fuck, Fuck, Fuck, Fuck,
Fuck, Fuck, Fuck, Fuck,
Fuck, Fuck, Fuck, Fuck,
Fuck, Fuck, Fuck, Fuck,

Cunt, Cunt, Cunt, Cunt,
Cunt, Cunt, Cunt, Cunt,
Cunt, Cunt, Cunt, Cunt,
Cunt, Cunt, Cunt, Cunt,

Cock, Cock, Cock, Cock,
Cock, Cock, Cock, Cock,
Cock, Cock, Cock, Cock,
Cock, Cock, Cock, Cock,

…shit…

and there my mind goes,
I think in blocks of swearwords,
and in a rhythm and rhyme
line of explicit content,
much like the bolded,
WARNING line above this post,

coast along, and see the billboards
that scream “FUCK ME,”
but not in words, but pouting,
shouting, make-me-scream-imagery,

and a nutcase drives by,
a nun, perhaps, and I,
under the fierce autumn sky,
and the white blurring line,
of the rhythm and rhyme of my mind,
slams on the breaks
of what was, of…because….

and they pout,

FUCK, FUCK, FUCK,

and they shout – parted lips,
t’ward hardened dicks,

CUNT, CUNT, CUNT

and the imagery scream,
as in spasms of orgasm,
of me…

COCK, COCK, COCK

-and so it goes on,

[dearest]

This is how to use language in a way that advances the point of the piece! Thought provoking and very in your face. I love it. ^_^

[Venomous Vixen]

You know I first read this piece when I was half asleep this morning and maybe it was just too early for it, because now as I reread it, it really is a clever little write. Though the beginning is a bit redundant it makes it point later on, and then the way you break the repetition again with lines of thoughts and images, well, really quite brilliant (never though I would say a stream of profanity and X-rated images was brilliant ). I really think the most appealing things about the piece are its boldness and honesty. You touched on something almost taboo here and without shame said, here, this is what I am thinking. Clever bugger you.

[RENA HANDS]

Captivating title! Really that’s what got me first.

Then I read the full content and thought what marvelous write.

coast along, and see the billboards
that scream “FUCK ME,”
but not in words, but pouting,
shouting, make-me-scream-imagery,

[x_lovely09]

Haha. So through the oncoming tiredness due to it being almost one a.m., this made me laugh and wake up some. <3

[Hazel]

I really didn't read every single word of the first three 'block stanzas'... I kind of took the image in as a whole and to me that set my mind up to follow your train of thought and imagery, because I still held those mental pictures of the blocks of 'profanity' in my head. So to me it all flowed, but in a disjointed fashion. I loved how you broke up the lines with the interrupting swearing, not only making your point but proving it. This was definitely amusing to read, lol, but you also had some great phrasing in there that made it to me a more serious piece. If... that makes any sense at all. I'm prolly just reading way too much into this. O.o

[Peppy]

Ha. An adrenaline of fecoricty in the poem. I liked it. I liked how you played the form in the poem, "I think in blocks of swearwords/WARNING line above this post." It was goo-de. From my interpretation, it's too human not to do it, right? When nature calls, right? I got a ton of those, so I'll stop there.

Good, good. A little graphic, but that's the mind's eye's problem.

[Corneac]

Yeah, I don't know. Sometimes I look at my poetry and can idenitfy all the different stages of my life in the last few years. It's haunting in a way. I think that's the biggest postive about my poetry is that I have that mirror. Thankyou Peppy.

[Rain]

That was great!