[Lubesh]

Let me down gently,
If you can.
I know you won’t,
Because you can’t.
Gravity loathes your intent,
Mists croak in your mind,
Where rivers once ran
And roaming dreams -
Their hooves ride roughshod
Over the slippery slopes
You chance to climb,
But ambitious steps are
Not enough to keep a steady footing,
Sooner or later you will falter
And fall,
Lose, lost but tethered
In an irony of
A freefall within
A giant leap off
The biggest,
Single most
Of undying intentions
- Love,
A magnanimous act,
But less so because
You wish to take me with you
You just can’t let me down –
Intact
No broken pieces
Of bone
Or blood
Or heart
While your elasticity holds
And the air swipes and misses
Every opportunity to grasp
And sway your desperate intention
Heady heights of your pendulum state
Orientates for one brief moment
You see your hopes and dreams
Are crushed below
You look down
From struggling frown
And know, as the chord is cut
And releases your magnanimity
And you come nearer to me,
You can’t ever let me down
As my feet have always been
On the ground.

[Venomous Vixen]

Reading this I went through a load of different feelings, first fear, the falling, the broken heart, and later that trick we play where we act like we don't care but the end was the best part for me... the always on the ground bit, don't know but it just fit perfectly. Anyhow, shorter lines were different, and punctuation too! I enjoyed the choppy feel of this, the single word 'love'. Almost like a strain of thought plucked and recorded. Wonderful.

[Lubesh]

Like 'falling' in love.....certain death lol and no fairies around with wings ay?

I stole the line's concept from The Eagles....(group)

thanks bri.......waddyamean punctuation..? I use it, course I do....sundays, wednesdays.....

[RENA HANDS]

Psychedelic!

You really know how to illustrate a trippy ride of whirlwind emotions.
But when all screams (from the bottom of one’s lungs) prying of squinted eyes (watering with fears)…when there’s nothing but the sweet relief of a firming end…what harmonious peace for the mind and so too the frozen body. (Is this rambling? My apologies.)

I HATE heights so I avoid all forms, but of this literal high…I would still choose to stand on solid ground looking up at the poor sucker who has the fear filling heart of erratic emotions.

WONDERFUL! WONDERFUL! WONDERFUL!

[Lubesh]

Did I call you a hippy? My apologies....your the original bard with sandals..but hippy i can spell thanks rena...love ur socks if u had any.lol

[Vorcla]

I've been remiss in keeping up with your poems; I always try to get right to them.

I love the feel of this, the almost desperate attempt to say your piece before you bottom out - and then the soft touchdown. Nice falling metaphors, with a touch of tongue-in-cheek humor, but poignant at the same time. As Bri mentioned, I like the staccato feel of this.

A man fell from a 20th story window. As he whizzed past each floor, he was heard to say, "So far, so good..."

[Lubesh]

Ha ha brilliant line....sheesh like my life. I love that you take time to comment helps me remember themlol. Thank you.