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D-Railed
When we cry
Do we cry in vain? Shedding tears As we near insane If we sigh Is it lost on us? Or blown in the wind To beat up the dust Debris forms from dark, daggered days Delusions sway during dismal dances Destiny dulls dazzling, dead chances Decisions dreaded are risks derailed Mangled steel from a sudden gust Ripped up train tracks Are they lost or us? If we try As we near the tunnel Treading fears Through bleak, back funnel Do we cry in vain? When we cry
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10-10-2008, 07:12 AM
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Re: D-Railed
Yeah - it's like, "Is anybody listening?" Really like the heavy "D" alliteration in the middle. Nicely done, Lu.
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10-10-2008, 07:16 AM
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Thanks Rick.
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10-10-2008, 09:03 AM
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Debris forms from dark, daggered days
Delusions sway during dismal dances Destiny dulls dazzling, dead chances Decisions dreaded are risks derailed Mangled steel from a sudden gust Those lines were my favorite, seemed to stand out, + the constant use of the letter d lol. The whole things was good, like all of your stuff.
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10-10-2008, 09:55 AM
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Thank you sweetheart.
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10-10-2008, 03:40 PM
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I missed your poetry! This is amazing... right from the roundabout effect you provided with the first and last lines to the alliteration. Fantastic alliteration, Lu! Very well done!
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11-10-2008, 04:55 AM
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Thank you v much! lol
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12-10-2008, 09:39 AM
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Talk about a tongue twister not to mention a mind twist…
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12-10-2008, 09:59 AM
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Thank you!
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