[loosygoosy007]

People's word are unheard,
Messages unread,
Their beliefs are blurred,
Not hearing what other people said.
Burried in the dirt,
Hidden forever,
Never to be read again.
Silenced are their tongues,
Broken are their lungs,
Trying to breathe,
Trying to express their way.
Silenced are their opinions,
Silenced are their names,
Silenced are their values,
Never to be the same.
People turn the other cheek,
Ignoring the words that express,
A world changing event or idea,
And never nothing less.
Don't listen to the silence,
Don't hear the empty air,
Speak until you can't speak any longer,
And express until there's none left to spare.

[DarkPower]

beautiful poem, I stuck it in human nature but if you dont like that just say so.

[Maud]

very good nothing else to say.

[BookWhale***]

I loved it, Goosy! I truly do! This is my favorite peice from you! Well, so far... lol

[Storiesmaniac]

Very interesting concept. nice work though. i enjoyed it

[Epsilonist]

Very good. Putting some empty lines in there might help to slow the reader down more and make them consider each concept.

[Fluzzle]

I think this is a really nice piece, it makes you think. I believe Epsilonist's suggestion of putting in a few empty lines would make for an easier read.

[Dark Kitten]

Really geat, your thoughts are very clear in this poem and your style is very open and conceptualized. I liked it a lot. I do, as well, third the motion for some empty lines however, though not too many because it would break up that concept. I would suggest between

.....
Never to be read again.

Silenced are their tongues,
.....

AND
.....
Trying to express their way.

Silenced are their opinions,
.....

AND

.....
Never to be the same.

People turn the other cheek,
.....

Maybe you agree, maybe you don't. Ultimatly you are the author and I would like this poem either way.
Triple YAY.
~DK

[JenB]

Originally Posted by Epsilonist

Very good. Putting some empty lines in there might help to slow the reader down more and make them consider each concept.

I agree, the flow could use a little bit of work. Putting in empty lines might do the trick. Awsome idea and awsome work!

[padmasundra]

I really like this a lot. it gets you to start thinking about things . Good work.

[padmasundra]

I like this a lot. It gets to start to ponder on things. Great job.

[Gigle]

Very good! I really like the idea and the writing beautifully brings it together.

I really liked your poem =, it made my mind stop ans start to question and think. Your poem seems like an archetype to me though, like its about outcasts and no one will listen to what they have to say an deveryone tries to ignor them because they don't care or just dont want to be seen around them. Also it seems like they have been excluded from the society they live in. But it's still great...i also liked your short story about outcasts both chapters of course.

[angel]

very good well written keep up good work

[catxwalk1234]

i like this poem a lot...i don't really have any criticism to offer.

[x_lovely09]

This poem is basically amazing. :] I truly liked it! And it definately speaks truth to society today.