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Twas the dawning of the age'd world
Storms of light reach beyond and far
into the yet unfurled
Tell the story of our growing sun
Hail the moons and stars and glory
We all fell from
'Conjure up a mystery
Do battle in your
most infancy.'
Bring on myths and ghosts and ill betide
Bring on war and put an end to peace
Our eyes are open wide
'I've seen it all around
But have found, your bickering
Will let you down.'
We will not be ever torn or put asunder
Deem us not what u have found
Riches we will not plunder
'Sow your seeds of doom
Misery and entomb
Your people won't live
Forever.'
Throw your ill found doubts and common fusion
All we hear are rabid shouts
And much delusion....
It is YOUR dying echoe WE are hearing.
Twas the dawning of the age'd world
Storms of light reach beyond and far
into the yet unfurled...
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08-04-2007, 09:40 AM
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That is a pretty damn good peice of writing...Really Really well done, the images were vivid, like an old dreamtime story...wonderful
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Dam good..still weird that thanks somuch
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Damn good. I agree with maniac...man that is intense. I could rant on about how much I loved it, but I'd be repeating what I say every time. Vivid, unsettling descriptions. And think there's more to this poem, a warning almost, a premonition of man's folly. A wise piece Anita.
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Glad you like it or rather appreciate it basically.thanks corneac
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i love this lu it is a beautiful piece. its so epic and well written. nice one lu
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damn...damn...damn good indeed, i agree with everybody. i love ur writing lubesh and i'll watch out for more from u.
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Seek and ye shall find lol thanks again bookworm.
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This is a great piece. It has a fantasy feel to it. I love the counterpoints of what is contained in the quotes and the reaction/interpretation after.
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Thanks Kalinda.
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