[SeaN]

He looked up from his New York Times;
beheld green eyes, swollen with tears.
Quickly he, did take a knee-
and tried to ease the young girls fears.

She asked him, "...do you love me still?"
As if their bond was broken.
The man replied, as young girl cried.
These tender words were spoken:

"You are my Daughter.
My love for you is exponential!

It will double on the 'morrow,
so today is consequential.

It grows so fast
to be surpassed
is beyond all potential...

I'll love you for eternity
and this love is exponential."

________

He looked up from his paperwork-
saw vacant, misty eyes.
These doctor's bills, and "Living Wills"
all came as a surprise.

A stubborn, wrinkled frown,
watched him from across the table.
This soul now pays a toll,
for sacrifice when body-abled.

"You are my Father.
My love for you is exponential!

It will double on the 'morrow,
so today is consequential.

It grows so fast
to be surpassed
is beyond all potential...

I'll love you for eternity
and this love is exponential."

________

He looked up from a checkbook
as his phone began to ring.
Answered fast, this call at last,
had come. He'd been waiting.

Reciever told of classes, dorms...
it spoke of a roommate.
Never-the less, he did confess;
just the sound of her voice, was great...

"You are my Sister.
My love for you is exponential!

It will double on the 'morrow,
so today is consequential.

It grows so fast
to be surpassed
is beyond all potential...

I'll love you for eternity
and this love is exponential."

________

He stood outside the station,
expression sober as the weather.
His clothes were wet, last time we met.
Both he and she together.

His eyes spoke first. "I'd love to talk
just man-to-man a bit...
but between the wife, and city life;
it's hard enough to visit."

"You are my Brother.
My love for you is exponential!

It will double on the 'morrow,
so today is consequential.

It grows so fast
to be surpassed
is beyond all potential...

I'll love you for eternity
and this love is exponential."

________

Our eyes met through that dirty glass.
I, shackled in all my shame.
She's posting bail; this ego frail
will falter just the same.


Could not even love myself-
I felt so lost and broken.
In her embrace, with twisted face
I first heard these words spoken:



"You are my Son.
My love for you is exponential!

It will double on the 'morrow, Sean
today is consequential.

It grows so fast
to be surpassed
is beyond all potential...

I'll love you for eternity
Son, my love is exponential..."

[Eadha Deora]

sounds like it should be a song

[SeaN]

well yeah I suppose so. I'm sorry you don't have more to say about it! I've been checking this one rather compulsively for comments since it was published

Is that an offer? How is your singing voice?

[Lubesh]

That was somewhat different and refreshing and well worked using your mainstay of that verse to pull all the scenarios together and made them equally applicablewith some deft writing in your words.Loved it.

[Eadha Deora]

Lu said it well.
At first, I wasn't actually sure if it was all the father's life, seen through his eyes and so forth, moving along. I think I was wanting to connect the people together, but I am not so sure it works that way, haha. So in a way, I was unsure of what to say in response. There did seem some falsity in some of the characters, as in, I didn't actually believe that they were meaning what they were saying! ... but by the end, I also realized I must be wrong. Lol .... it just shows my perspective on humanity. :blush:

My singing voice? LOL ... well I can't sing rock to save my life unless it's Evanescence. I have a choir voice, I'm afraid, which means I can handle Enya-like, ethereal music well too. I can belt out drinking songs and good hard rock'n'roll--but let's just say I wouldn't win the Karaoke contest. hehe

[SeaN]

Jenn, thank you for the thoughtful rebutle! and Lu, thank you for your comments as well.

It's actually working backwards in time.

The first three (me to my daughter, me to father, me to sister) are in the future- they have not happened yet. The final two, (me to brother, and my mother to me) have already happened.

[Corneac]

Man...what can I say? I do believe on your short time on this site you become one of my favourite poets. You have such an earnest way of laying out your words for the world to see. It is simply amazing and heartbreaking all at the same time. Haha. Great job mate.

I could tell even before I read your comment about this being about your family. It meant a lot to you, it just seemed real emotionally honest. Poetic and heartfelt.

I can relate to this. I liked how you put yourself in differing shoes, show s a real talent for empathy. Stylistically it was a breath of fresh air and the repetition brought home the reality of the unbreakable bounds of family. Great job.

[SeaN]

Corneac that's very flattering my friend. Thanks allot man.

[Nupur]

Very heartfelt. I can't add anything to what's already been said. Just want to tell you how much I loved this.

[Vorcla]

Wow. Nice. I love it when folks go back and unearth material that's been in the archives for a while. Nice treat.

[RENA HANDS]

Is there one girl (girl’s fears) or is there a group of girls (girls’ fears)?

Was the spacing in the last stanzas deliberate? Does it serve a purpose? I am me so I have to ask such questions…lol

The whole poem with its collective parts…EXQUISITE! If I try and say anything more, I will have defeated my purpose to comment.

I will however, give a rating of 5/5!