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Old 13-04-2005, 10:50 PM
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Bathos

Are you lonely?
Then know that I am too,
Do you even know me?
Well know that I know you....

But you were far and I was near,
You were there and I was here,
Don't twist my words or misconstrue
The meaning false to something true,
But I'm leaving now, without a doubt,
Still wondering what you're all about.

I remember you at the bus stop,
Dancing like a fool,
Drunk and high,
You fell off the bar stool.

But I wanted you then as I do now,
Whatever you want I will allow,
The only reason I didn't before
Was because you were under sixteen,
And it was against the law
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Old 14-04-2005, 10:46 AM
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Re: Bathos

Lol!!! Wow! at least we know you're not a molestor . . . now, rapist . . . lol. jk. That's not a joking matter. But anyway. I liked it. I know it's a "romance" one, but the ending made it seem more like it should have been in humor section. lol . . . sorry, but I laughed and laughed when I finished reading it. sigh . . . good one.
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Yeah, well I started off writing it seriously, and was until I got to the last two lines, and then they just popped out, I mean, the girl it's about I didn't even meet until she was 17, I dunno maybe I'll move it lol
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Old 15-04-2005, 10:44 AM
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lol . . . well you're roughly that age too, grrrr . . . so it's not TOO underage. lololol . . . and then there's always tranquility. *giggles and dodges blow from tranquility who is looking VERY opposite her name*
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And what exactly are you implying Eadha?
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