[Casanova_NoMore]

I'm still smiling, i like how it drew me in at first then ends in a nice laugh. It short and sweet, it works. Good work

[Syrah]

Funny Tyler. Who said it was you, eh? and thanks Casinova. Much appreciated

[SeaN]

lol syrah I have read this one many many times and I laugh harder with every re-read I think

Nicely done

[RENA HANDS]

A straight forward scenery filled with great emotion.

[Rolling Pichu]

This is witty... Only flaw I could find could be rhythm. But then again it's too short to go into too much detail. I enjoyed it...

~Steven

[Peppy]

I don't think it was ha-ha. It was sad. The imagery was excellent, but I don't really see the humour in it. The last line didn't work for me, it should have packed a punch--Boom!-Don't-forget-me sense. It would be funny if you just found the right word which sounds funny.

[Vorcla]

I think it's cute. Very pretty imagery in the first stanza, then the chuckle in the second. Damned fine for a little short tongue-in-cheek piece, honny.

[Hurricane]

LOL I do it. At first i though thos was more heartbreak but when I finished reading it I lmao. Thank you. My friends got a kick out of it to.

[Syrah]

Hahaha. Thank you for reading it! It was a bit of fun to write, too.


To all who have commented- Thank you very much. I really have appreciated all your points of view

[Rain]

Ha! That was great. I like how short, simple, and fun it was, Sy. Nice poem

[Syrah]

Thank you Tay