[isidra]

The content in this poem is dark,
If you look closely you shall seek the mark,
The mark that takes you to look even closer,
To the very end you will never find the mark that makes you wonder.

Ponder you will to your very limit,
Read this over again till then you throw a fit,
Should I begin this sorrow tale,
Or would you remember this very say?

Away away the wind blows his hat,
From that day, Collin never lost a bet,
Where the vicious witch cursed him to death,
But only hit him lightly with zeath.

Zeath, a spell only to be known,
Known by me the author of the unknown,
This curse haunts most people in the town you live in,
This world, this country of sin.

What it does you ask?
For it is you to find out,
A new arrival you have found a task,
Is the answer there, Or is it lying about?

The truth is,
Zeath is age that brings hair-loss like his,
If your lucky maybe even wrinkles,
All of you, pity are destined to look like pringles!

[Clara]

I had to laugh when I reached the end of this poem..... Glad you placed it in humour...
I think, Zeath is my curse!

[Odanion]

Uhm...I was trying to read this...but after the third line I started to stumble over each line...I do not want to sound negative...but I cannot seem to find a rythem in this...its more like a rhyming story than a poem...the actual content is funny yes...but unfortunatley it is hard to read a poem where the rythem is constantly changing

[RENA HANDS]

This does not seem like a poem. This piece seems more like a fairy tale of sort.

[Venus]

haha thats great, funniest thing about it is its a really good poem lol

[a&Ω]

Very interesting. It almost seems like a parody of a poem, rather THAN a poem.

[angel]

this is a fantastic piece. well put across and structured. nice 1 mate

kel

[rosetheruler]

Yes, I must agree with some of the sttements of above. It could almost be a rhyming story. And I do like those

[Nephilim]

its interesting. i cant really say i enjoyed most of it, but the punch line was certainly worthwhile. the syntax of the central lines compared with the end seem a little off, but i suppose that belongs to your poetic license. anyway i cant really bash poetry, because it means something different to each person that reads it, and i commend you for writing.