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Old 19-04-2007, 07:19 AM
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Fool's Paradise

Oh, the rivers flow with beer!
No darn garden-eating deer,
The town's made out of chocolate!
Friends to all that you have met

Full of blondes and blue-eyed rents!
Wives take no offense!
The local bar has no lock!
Curfew's 25 o' clock!

All the jobs start at near noon,
Then ends in the afternoon!
C'mon and roll these here dice!
We're in a Fool's Paradise!
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:20 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

hmmm chocolate mars galaxy yummy............. nvm sweet poem lol
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:21 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Hehe, thanks, this one's my magic number 5 for today, so I thought I'd make something goofy... glad you liked it!
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:24 AM
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how can u not like chocolate lol
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:25 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Sounds like my city actually lol That was a very orange poem masa lol But magical nonetheless.
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:25 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Who doesn't love chocolate, honestly? Hehe...
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:26 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Well Lubesh you live in a heck of a town I'll tell you that! Thanks for commenting! And yes, it is rather orange, which I believe is a rather unorthadox color, so it fits well I thought.
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Re: Fool's Paradise

I like the idea of a town made out of chocolate, lol fun poem!
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Old 19-04-2007, 07:51 PM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Well thanks! I bet that'd be an awesome place to live...
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Chocolate, who doesn't love chocolate eh! Love the orange by the way.
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Old 20-04-2007, 06:33 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Thank you oh so very much! You're right, who doesn't love chocolate in all of its chocolatey wonders?
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Old 20-04-2007, 06:51 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Rivers of beer and a town made of chocolate... seems like Homer Simpson would love it.

Short and sweet. I could see you taking this to even more stanzas.
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Old 20-04-2007, 07:01 AM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Homer? The epic storyteller? I didn't know he liked chocolate... his last name is Simpson? Ah... Masa is so confused...

And yeah I could have added more stanza's but... for some reason I felt complete with this... maybe I could throw in some more stuff fool's like...
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Quote:
Oh, the rivers flow with beer!
Mmm...Beer

A delightful poem Masa! Simply marvelous! Good on'ya boyo...
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Old 20-04-2007, 08:43 PM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

I knew someone would love that line! Thank you again Corneac, allow me to give you the key to the town and enjoy your stay in the Fool's Paradise!
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Re: Fool's Paradise

wow, wives that dont care about what you think of other women! i dont know why im surprised by that, im not married by any stretch, but ive watched enough tv to know that that is the faux paux of our generation. so its perfect to be free of it.

now this land you speak of...it seems wonderful. would that make me a fool?
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Old 08-05-2007, 06:49 AM
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I'm glad... you are very lax! Now then, just enjoying this town does not make you a fool, not enjoying it may... hahaha, oh well, fools are nonsensical, and as am I. Now does that make me a fool?
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haha masa; this one is a little rough around the edges, but I got a good laugh out of it. I really needed it too (the laugh, not the poem). Thanks man.
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Old 10-05-2007, 08:34 PM
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Re: Fool's Paradise

Simply here for the smiles my friend, if I make people smiled, I'm happy.
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Aye.

Alittle rough on the edges, but a good laugh nonetheless. The orange on the font color is quite vivid though.
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Old 30-05-2007, 09:55 AM
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