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07-07-2007, 09:42 AM
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Buzz Kill
Pig, Fuzz, that's me strolling the streets
Boots shining, helmet gleaming Nightstick twirling between the beats "Wha..? Who is this before me?" Platform boots, planted, Navy polyester swaying, Afro glimmering in the heat, Lips glossed, glistening. "Mmm, Mmm." Hey there groovy mama, Let's return to my pad and catch a buzz, Smirks and angels laughter. Share a bong? Chase the dragon? Flat foot you crazy. Lava lamps glowing, Love beads entwining between our fingers, Peace signs blanketing the walls, Flat foot you barmy. You wear a badge, Following the law, I play the skins, Screaming "Free love." Free love, Free love, I can dig it, My handcuffs on your wrists, Melting wax sliding down your thigh. Copper, stop! You bum me out, You flirt, You tease, "Dude you are the Establishment. I'm a flower child. We will never hang out." Rena Hands July 2007 Last edited by RENA HANDS; 22-02-2008 at 02:23 PM. 
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07-07-2007, 09:58 AM
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Re: Buzz Kill
You tell a great story! I really enjoyed this, especially when the woman spoke.
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07-07-2007, 09:59 AM
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Re: Buzz Kill
Hilarious and a challenge well met lol Is this Ms rena uncovered? haha You are becomin quite an all rounder. Hats off to you.
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07-07-2007, 02:39 PM
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Re: Buzz Kill
intense... great concept... it screams perfection... keep up the good work
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09-07-2007, 05:24 PM
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Re: Buzz Kill
Haha...wow. That's amazing Rean...you painted an intriguing and quite amusing picture. Last stanza was the best, the funniest, but wow...great job Rena. Great use of description.
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09-07-2007, 10:59 PM
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Re: Buzz Kill
 Rena I like this one allot too. Very interesting style, and I feel like there is a message- kind of a social statement rooted deep in this one. There is an irony in the actions of the cop, and an innocence that brims from the girl.My favorite part was your descriptions; specifically in stanza 2. It's great the way your point of view switches back and fourth. Terrific use of language to set a mood. Groovy poem Rena! 
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