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Old 30-03-2008, 01:40 PM
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Silly Love Songs

Love is supposedly
Much too thin for us to see
If love is in the details
They why, I wonder,
Do all the love songs
Hitched, graffiti tattooed,
Car to car and end to end
Sound exactly the same?
It’s in your eyes
It’s in your smile
It’s in the taste of you
I love your eyes, smile, and lips, babe
Baby, oh-oh-oh
Love is presumably
Much too clever to be captured in words
If I love the way your shoulder curves,
Ripe and earthen curves,
If the raw, exposed beauty
Of the way your shoulder curves
Leaves me breathless,
Is this not love?
It’s in your skin
It’s in your bones
It’s in the landscape of you
I love your skin, bones, and mountains, babe
Baby, oh-oh-oh
Love is inevitably
Much too complicated to be explained by lips
Can love be the way you move,
The manner in which your pick up
Your coffee cup
With a sort of clumsy grace,
A tanned, hammer-holding grace,
That it’s a good ache when you touch my face?
It’s in your movements
It’s in your touch
It’s in the motion of you
I love your walk, touch, and grace, babe
Baby, oh-oh-oh
Love is simply
Too much for a single tune.
If I do love the clearness of your eyes,
The easy, honey warmth of your smile,
The comfortable way your hair falls into your eyes,
Can't I love your off-key humming when you do the dishes,
The print of your necktie and the crook in your elbow,
Can the way you always lose your keys tell me what is love?
It’s in your eyes
It’s in your smile
It’s in the fingerprinted whorls of you
I love your eyes, smile, and soul, babe
Baby, oh-oh-oh
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Old 30-03-2008, 04:44 PM
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Re: Silly Love Songs

Hmm. I rather like this one. I get a feel for it in an old Motown sort of feel to it. I like that it has repetition like a normal song, but not strictly followed in the bridge to chorus style- changing words to similar but definitely different ones.
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Old 31-03-2008, 04:55 AM
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Re: Silly Love Songs

Glad you enjoyed it. ^_^ That's what I was going for.
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Re: Silly Love Songs

Wonderful Tricia! I love how you're trying to write about 'silly love songs' by actually incorporating a song into this. Very good effect. Beautiful thought you've captured here and you've expressed it in a brilliant manner. I love this!
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Re: Silly Love Songs

Yes, I echo what has been said before me. It is almost a mocking of the way people have put things into words, adding them into italics and making them really pop out. More so than that though, I love the ideas you brushed on in the regular font, the feeling of the curve of a shoulder, the burning left after a touch. One of my favorites from you and bold in the thought process. Well done!
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Old 01-04-2008, 06:41 AM
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Re: Silly Love Songs

Thanks Nupur and Bri. After listening to another cookie-cutter love song about some guy's amazing smile, I just kind of snapped and wrote this in retaliation. Because, honestly, the hopeless romatic in me really does love a good love song. ^_^
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You need to snap more often, Tricia! This was great. Very clever, and nicely executed.
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Re: Silly Love Songs

I'll do my best. ^_^ Thanks Rick.
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Re: Silly Love Songs

I love the idea of the song u have here, with the whole if love is blind then why do so many people see it so similarly ie. in love songs that all sound the same. But I think the ending is giving off the idea that poem's are a better way to show love to someone then a song? is that what your going for? If so i'd have to disagree but you do make your argument in a beautiful way

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Re: Silly Love Songs

Thanks for the comment! I left this one pretty open for interpretation, so whatever you see in it is absolutely correct. ^_^ As for poetry over songs, I don't know. Both can miss the point: just a cute tune or just a trite little verse, however, when the essence of the writer's feeling is really captured, I think either medium is a viable way to show love. Thanks again for your thoughts. ^_^
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Re: Silly Love Songs

I love the whole idea of writing a song about "silly love songs"

I would love to actually hear this as a song, and hear how it would flow.

Although I’m definitely not a expert, I think you have done a great job.
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Thanks for the comments paul. Yes, this is more of a song than a poem really, and it does have a tune. I'm not sure if I have the musical ability to make a recording of it and do it justice, so for now, it's in limbo. Thanks again for commenting; it's been a bit since I wrote this one and I'd forgotten about it. This sort of pleasant reminder is nice every now and then. Thanks for digging this one up. ^_^
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Re: Silly Love Songs

This is so nice - I saw it come up again and thought I'd revisit it. If I knew how it went, I'd try to record it - although as swamped as I am right now, that's probably an idle promise. Nice job, though, Tricia.
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