[PaulJJ]

Love, Wait.

Waiting for the shade,
sitting on the earth that moans.
Waiting for the morning,
the sun that awakes and groans.

Waiting for you to love me,
here comes the night.
Waiting to wash away,
the mist that hides the light.

Listen to me now,
hear my love that sleeps.
Listen to the thump,
with one breath, it leaps.

Listen to the rhythm,
my heart has two left feet.
Choking on my words,
you begin to start a beat.

Losing what I had made.
With two cold hands you let me rest.
Parting what I did not want.
I place my head upon your chest.

Stars move to loves mantra,
whisper away, you’re hush-hush.
Release the ache,
your naked skin so, so lush.

Street lights
Bright,
You love
Tonight.

[Venomous Vixen]

Here come the night

comes?

This is beautiful, truly. The use of motion and sound within the lines gave a full image for me. Sometimes love poems come off as spineless sap but not this, it was pure, almost innocent, but moreso heartfelt and real. I look forward to more from you! Congrats on your first publication here

[Sith Lord Jim]

Superb stuff Pauliey. Really really good. Looking foward to reading more of your work.
~Jim

[Rain]

Really really full of emotion, which I love most about it. Heartfelt, like Bri said. I think I'm gonna be a fan of your work Paul

[PaulJJ]

Thanks Vixen, fixed it up. Thanks for ya comment, I wasnt really expecting any good feedback from it, I really dont show many people my work, but a friend told me about this site and thought I would give it a go and its been great.

Thanks Jim Jams, looing forward to reading some more of ya stories when i got some time.

Thanks Rain. Im already a fan of your work!

Thanx guys.

[Peppy]

Cool. I liked this one a lot. I read it smoothly. I was never the one to like to read lovy-dovy poetry, but this is exceptional. You ryming sounds good, it didn't sound like a bad cliché. In a symbolistic and literalt sense, this was good.

Awesome entry. But there's something bugging me about the ending though. Hell, could just be me. You can check it out or not.

[Vorcla]

Nicely done. Very smooth, nice flow, great images. Especially good for a first effort.

[PaulJJ]

Thanks a ton Peppy, also thanks for going through and commenting my posts, Rick as well. Appreciate it a lot. It’s always nice to get feedback.