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A Blip on their Radar
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28-07-2008, 10:07 AM
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A Blip on their Radar
Up, up and away in my beautiful balloon….
From here I can see the ants and seething, envious stare Wandering in the clouds but watching from way down there Would you like to soar and savour sweet, hot airs? Then we can fly. Gases fill and make curvaceous our swelled, crowned plume Weighty ballast temporarily hinders our tethered run from gloom Our eyes of conscience fill the green field of doom We sever the ropes Intoxicated, weightless smiles float aloft, aiming for heaven's might One by one we cut all ties and make lighter our hearts and fight Miniscule become the haunts and are sped past, by the ghosts of our night As we drop more goodbyes
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29-07-2008, 10:44 AM
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Re: A Blip on their Radar
Ah, Lu. Just so nice. Your incredible word choices and wonderful imagery, all those things are expected of you, and you never disappoint. Excellent job. Supposedly flying in a hot air balloon is a real rush. I'll never know; I get nosebleed on a stepladder!
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29-07-2008, 11:19 AM
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Re: A Blip on their Radar
Added to my invisible list..hot air balloon and handy it would have been..stuff the nose bleed (literallyand not)lol Thanks rick - much appreciated all this.
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07-08-2008, 03:36 AM
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Re: A Blip on their Radar
Okay, this has just made the "Top 5 for Lu List". I'm not sure where it falls in the top five, but it's there.
We have a couple of locals that own hot air balloons, and they fly them about every other day, from Spring to Fall. I used to go out to the country to watch them practice take-off and landing procedures with noobs in the fall, when the crops had been harvested and the fields were bare. I've never done it before, but I keep telling myself I will. Your poem has got my heart racing with the excitement that must surely belong to those who have crossed the line between doers and my ilk. If I were Rena, I'd say, "You have my highest rating of 5/5."
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07-08-2008, 03:39 AM
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Re: A Blip on their Radar
If you trust me at all....do it don't interfer and take that chance...then my poem?pfftlol
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07-08-2008, 03:46 AM
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Oh yeah, I forgot to say nice twist on the catagory, btw.
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07-08-2008, 03:58 AM
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What twist?lol
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