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Re: Love is
Well, I love it! Definitely two thumbs and two big toes enthusiastically up! (This feels weird
LOL) Post man!
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That was simplicity itself, on a difficult and profound concept, which is...simple! You nailed it some...for those of us need spoonfeeding sometimes. I wasn't sure re the 'simple' alnguage u used ie english but that query was just answered, lovely. Today you are more grown young man lol and I look forward to the rare, yes rare steaks you throw our way.
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Hahaha thank you anita, it was meant to be simple, but it wasnt so simple to write, because there really is no way of defining love... Thanks for reading!!
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Which is why this is so great. Well, I love the simplicity here, Tim. Lean and clean, as they say. Clarity of expression is off the scale. Nice wordplay throughout, especially with the "ion" sounds. I've made a vow that I want to become a decent poet, and I'm reading everything I can to see how it's done. Glad I read this one. Excellent work!
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Thank you for reading this rick, my work may not be the best work to look at if you want to be a good poet, i made a vow in school when we were studying poetry that i would write what i mean, (with exception sometimes) so that dumbass's like me could understand them. Which works out well when people read them, but they arent in depth and amazing like alot of other poetry on the site.
Thank youfor the compliments though
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I liked this alot stories. It's nice to read something simple that I dont have to use my brain, this early in the morning to. But at the same time, says so much. I wish love was simple for me lol
awesome stuff.
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Hey man, I just want to say like everybody the simplicity is amazing. It's hard to catch such a complex thing like love, and make it so simple, and you seemed to do it easily. Good stuff.
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hahaha thanks pauljj, im glad you enjoyed it, love is simple for everyone, it' just finding it thats a bitch,
Thanks tay, it seemed easy but it wasnt that easy to make it simple...lol
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I promised a proper review on this one... and though a day late, you still love me
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I also thoroughly enjoyed the smashing of all of the cliches, it's not the rescue of or being rescued, and it's not sex... far too many mistaken moments where lust disguises as love and people are too encapsulated to realize that. Ah, and then the action, again, breaking common usage of the phrase and reminding people love is shown, not told. Your outlook is so pure, and things we often all forget, quite refreshing. You continue the same mood throughout, not specifically defining what love it but breaking all of the falsities of what it is not. That ending 'Love is' worked perfectly. I saw a new one up from you and was so excited, and after reading it even more so. Your style has changed a bit from when I first joined, and I have enjoyed watching you grow. This is another one of my favorites, not tangled and confusing but as is, a beautiful explanation of something that we all try and define. Perfect
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Thank you so much Bri, haha im glad you enjoyed it even if you ar slightly bias...it's a hard thing to write about love in a way that everyone can feel something from it. So it's not just a sappy poem that has no meaning but to the poet.
For the first time in my life i can truely say I'm in love, and now i dont know how to define it... Thank you again bri, i love your comments they make me look at my own work and try to improve on things where i can!
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that was good you did a good job of explaining your opinion of what love is. I think it was pretty dang good.
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Thank you very much Jsouz!
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That was absolutely brilliant... I'm not gonna say anything besides that.
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Thank you very much
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I really enjoyed reading that. I feel like I am missing some deep hidden meaning, but every time I look back at it, the poem retains its original meaning.
Short and sweet, excellent job. |
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The beautiful thing i find about this poem...(and it might not have worked for anyone but me) but there is hidden meaning...depending on whether you are in love or not. I find that while i simply have stated what love is not, and that love is simple, someone who is in love can find themselves saying "But blah blah is love, and my darling does that for me."
Thank you very much for reading this and enjoying it.
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I liked it man, I know you set out for it be simple, frank and try to nail what exactly it is. Hard concept, I think you made a good shot at it man. i think some bit were, not repetitive, repetition is good, but I think you could have used it more effectively because it verged at redundant in places.
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