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29-08-2008, 10:55 AM
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Merry
Merry go around,
Floss for the fairies. Slow nights, secret intentions. You and I so colour full, fun times and full moons. We danced all night. Teddy bears and cocaine. We all had a taste, Oh what a waste. Merry don’t go round, Why not stay and dance? Looking for the exit, trapped in a trance. You and I so colour full, fun times and full moons. I checked the wire, you wrote me a love song, it made everyone dance, all night long. You and I so colour full, late nights and cartoons. We danced all night. Teddy bears and cocaine. We all had a taste, Oh what a waste. Merry, lets go round, Hands unite, lights out small town, big souls full moons, fake pouts.
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Clementine: This is it, Joel. It's going to be gone soon. Joel: I know. Clementine: What do we do? Joel: Enjoy it. Last edited by PaulJJ; 03-10-2008 at 11:14 AM. 
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31-08-2008, 02:53 AM
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Re: Merry
I love the tone of this one; it's flippant, carefree, a little psychedelic, and manages to actually SAY something. Excellent! Favorite line: "You and I so colour full". Love the seperation of "colorful", very smart, adds just the right emphasis. Very, very well done.
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The fog comes on little cat feet. It sits looking over harbor and city on silent haunches and then moves on. -Carl Sandburg
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31-08-2008, 11:24 PM
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Re: Merry
Hey thanks Dearest. I really appreciate it. I just kinda just tried to have fun with this one. Thanks again
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Clementine: This is it, Joel. It's going to be gone soon. Joel: I know. Clementine: What do we do? Joel: Enjoy it.
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02-10-2008, 01:21 AM
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Re: Merry
Now this is the shit. I enjoyed this. Pretty imagery indeed. Nice choice of words, actually, excellent choice of words. Your choice of words makes this really special, I couldn't remove my mind away. This is just awesome.
Good work. Quote:
 . I thought it was part of the chorus:Quote:
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02-10-2008, 06:42 AM
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Re: Merry
Now, this is probably the best piece you've written. I like this a lot; I've written a few songs myself, and know what's involved with putting one together. Nice flow, nice rhythm. Good job on this.
Rick
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03-10-2008, 11:21 AM
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Re: Merry
Thanks again guys. Loving the comments
 . This is my first attempt at writing a song. I guess it turned out alright. I decided to edit it a little, I think it sounds just as good, if not a little better, thanks Peppy.
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Clementine: This is it, Joel. It's going to be gone soon. Joel: I know. Clementine: What do we do? Joel: Enjoy it.
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14-11-2008, 12:09 PM
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Re: Merry
Very nicely written song, and very enjoyable read. Wonderful job PaulJJ, and you should write more of these little gems, and so I can look forward to reading them
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