[spinx]

The light so close
at hand,

to give in and
reach out for
just one moment,

one moment of
peace and no
pain as resurrection
has one cost to
bear,

say goodbye to
all that is fair
or
hold the hand
of death's despair,

grasping ahold of
a life well known,

say hello to deaths
own pair of loss
of frugality and
lifes mortality as
you wave on sins
immorality,

the light yet fades
away,

and the night
shade hides
your face with
fangs glistening
in the moon's light with
streaming arrays of
reds,

stalking and
searching for
the next nights
courses,

biting and feeding
off life's blood
sources regaining
more brutal forces,

scratching and
crawling to exit
dawns pathway,

hoping and praying
dusk comes shortly,
as your feel the
hunger of rage
flowing within your
blackened veins of
fiery,

you end it all with
one step into
sun lights beauty,

oh,

but you where
only dreaming,

to prowl the night
you love to much
to give up such lust
for one soul,

to touch the ray of
light with such hopes
of ending the nights feasts
of blood thirsty beasts,

one soul is to many
to trust as you lie
quiet beneath your
pillars of the deep,

and only the troll
beneath knows your
secret fable

[spinx]

i thought you might like this one darkpower. hope you like it.

[DarkPower]

WAIT!!!! I missed this one. No one told me a vampire poem by spinx had arived. HOW DARE YOU ...I cant believe this. I love it. wow. this is nice and dark yet it gives me a feeling of something lost. Then you snatch that feeling away by saying they wouldnt give it up. yes I do like it spinx its very nice.

this was sooo cool i loved it and i hope you make more.

it's seriously cool.

That was seriously awesome

[Mike]

That was...epic. Wow I never thought you could use poetry for something like that. It's very sensual (lol). You read the Anne Rice books?

[spinx]

thank you, glad you liked it, and no i have not read anne rice.

[Mike]

I recommend you do. Perhaps you've seen the Interview With A Vampire Film? It was made from her book. She doesn't write poetry but it's considered a classic if your interested in Vampires.

[spinx]

yes i have seen that. love it. did not know she wrote it. i will look into her books. thanx for the siggestion.

[RENA HANDS]

I found the read to be questioning; perhaps because of the spelling errors and the rhyme seems off. The first spelling error: ressurection-resurrection, lifes-life's, moonslight-moon light's, lifes-life's, withing-within, sunlights-sun light's, and your are missing some commas at most a period or two. I want to state beyond the writing errors the poem was a very delightful read.

[Theru]

Hmm, mood and theme-wise, this reminds me a little bit of some of the lyrics from Jim Steinem's Dance of the Vampires, in the way that the subject matter was approached, with a hint of some of the more recent Dracula reincarnations, in particular the tentative musical version, which had a bit of that Anne Rice "reeling immortality" feeling that this poem has.

The one thing that really jumped out at me was the inconsistency of the rhyme and meter-- it seemed initially to be a sort of blank verse, but then one of the stanzas progressed in a definitely-rhyming, sonnet-like pattern, and another one a while down had a completely different verse form. The stanzas (verses?) were also rather inconsistent in their length.

The narrator of the poem, I thought, was also a little distant. Is it a vampire? An onlooker? Somebody who never even existed? That might just be because I wasn't paying close enough attention the first few times through to tell...

Either way, it has a rather nice atmosphere, I think-- though the form seems a little patchy (what with a couple instances of reversed homonyms here and there.)