[Eadha Deora]

Sea is cold, and waves are lonely.
My heart, it aches for you only.
Come! Yes, we can be together.
Come, I call you. Come forever.

Why did you forsake me in need?
To my commands you shall now heed.
Come! All bonds you must now sever.
Come, I call you. Come forever.

Foolish man! to ignore my pleas.
For my pain, you'll dwell underseas.
Come! These waters you'll leave never.
Come, I call you. Come forever.

You shall fill my hours with your love,
E'en if I stole you from above.
Come! Sink into the sea-heather.
Come, I call you. Come forever.

The heather makes secret our home.
You're mine! Come with me 'neath the foam.
Come! Yes, we shall be together.
Come, I call you. Come forever.

[Verbatim]

What a wonderfully beautiful poem. You are so very good at writing poetry. You will soon one day be published, and I will say, "I used to know her before she ever was well known, and even then she was so very good at writing poetry." Your writing has such gorgeous gorgeousness that I'm struggling to swallow.

[DarkPower]

I second that. Great poetry.

[BookWhale***]

It was beautiful! It truly was. You are so good at using symolies, or whatever they are called... lol

[Wordsmyth]

Very nice! I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[RENA HANDS]

The most exciting and enthralling setting.

[Nupur]

Excellent Kyrielle, Eadha! You took the usual refrain a step forward by beginning the third line of each stanza with the same word. You managed to that beautifully. It wasn't looking repetitive, in fact, it enhanced the message you're trying to get across.

E'en if I stole you from above.

You're mine! Come with me neath the foam.

Although I guess you did this because of the syllable count, the two shortened words look very good. My only suggestion is to add an apostrophe before 'neath'.

Overall I felt this was very well done.

[Eadha Deora]

I didn't even know it was a kyrielle, lol. That was just how I wrote it! LOL
Thank you so much for your encouragement ... ... and I've taken your advice about the 'neath.