[Eadha Deora]

Let go ...
... Let go ...
... Let go

like the clouds release their rain,
so too drop this heaviness and
return to the lightness of air.

The rain will come and
so too must all these go,
hitting the ground with the

weight of suffering,
only to find
wings in the wind,
the spirit buoyant with the

freedom of release.

[Vorcla]

Ah - hard to find words, Jenn. I've seen some incredible stuff on this site today, and your poem is one of them. I like the "falling" structure with the rain at the beginning, and the metaphor of the rain and human burdens, and how they're similar.

Very nice.

[MindsEye]

The hold or hesitate and "release" sensation that you have created by using "and" and "the" to end certain lines is very effective. It makes me nearly hold my breath between those lines. This is the living poetry that breathes with us... coaxing us along its path drawing us into its depths or in this case setting us free from our earthly ties. Brilliant and simply wonderful.

[Eadha Deora]

hey I never noticed that but I suppose I shouldn't say that haha. You are very right though ... it does create a hold and release sensation. Thank you for your words and you too Vorc

[RENA HANDS]

I should be able to give something more, yet at this moment, I cannot...

So until I am verbally able, aceept my highest rating of 5/5!