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Old 21-01-2006, 04:43 AM
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Day Goes Away

Suprise it's sunrise,
giving light before the night,
the heart of the start,
until we get, sunset;
day goes away,
for Mars and the stars,
and the moon's afternoon.
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Re: Day Goes Away

I like the internal rhyme in each line. "The moon's afternoon" sounded playful.
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