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Re: A Squirrel and a Meadowlark
I get a sense of haiku when I read this, but not quite.
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Re: A Squirrel and a Meadowlark
Ooh, nice! A mini-story fit neatly into a pretty poem.
I enjoyed your use of 'fancy' words, such as 'betwixt', 'voyeur', and 'supine.' They gave the poem a professional quality. In my opinion, this encounter is highly realistic, and gives a sense of nature and how animals interact with each other. There are no grammatical/spelling errors that I can find, so good job on that! Overall, lovely poem; I really liked reading it. |
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Re: A Squirrel and a Meadowlark
I had to look supine up, it's nice too feel my vocabulary grow.
It's a nice little poem about a nice little story too.
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Re: A Squirrel and a Meadowlark
Excellent use of vocabulary and a brillant voyeuristic glance into the interactions of nature. I love it.
~DK
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I love the vocabulary and cuddily nature imagery! I also liked the circular flow between the first stanza and last (repeating). Dare I say, that it could be a metaphor for the cycle of life? (I'm probably just being crazy)
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Marvelous vocabulary! And the imagery…Remarkable! You’ve managed the execution of so few words, but stirred so many more mental imagery. And the emotions evoked/provoked…hair chilling standing on rooted end!
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Right, I'll keep to the present but just take a glance at the past. Damn, is this poetry?
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