[Laughing Man]

The Overture of May
t.l.Coye

And so my mind had drifted
From a quiet soft parade, of
Endless tempting seraphs
Of the soul, out into a garden
Bursting with the summer’s
Orchestra of May.

Giant daisies, thrusting forth
From a morning’s dampened
Ground, tilt limply as the silver
Shards of dew taunt the pallid
Petals as a weighty crown.

Maple leaves dance noiselessly
In soft embrace of forceful winds
As moths contort a ballet
Of graceful conquest, having
Swept the moon beneath their heavy wings.

While my peering eyes had fallen
Casually upon a fading sun,
The calm day subsided into a star-filled
Ocean, dark and bleak.
Heaven fluted high concertos deep
Into my thoughts, whilst shadows
Stole across a golden field of wheat

How calm the orchestra of
Summer’s sweet perfume, which
Drowns my senses and drags
Away myself into the fallen
Overtures of nightly hues.

[Laughing Man]

Okay, so i might be a little rusty. Tell me what you think. lol.

[Lubesh]

Crumbs....worked for me...the only missing ingredient was....nothing I had toGoogle.

You have been sorely missed....for my next onelol Can you make it more surreal

beautifuland allthe rest

[Laughing Man]

ahah yeah i will make my next one more surreal... and i will add in sumthings you need to google so you feel comfortable.

[Lubesh]

Cheers lol now thats apoet

[Venomous Vixen]

Yes, I agree with Lu, that's a poet! Beautiful.. the images you packed in there are just incredible. I would not change a thing, rusty or not, you have lost nothing! Good to see you back

[Laughing Man]

lol thanks Bri.

[xtremelady]

Gorgeous imagery and portrayal N1

[Nupur]

Brilliant images. You've packed in quite a lot here, but it all seemed to flow really well. Your descriptions were absolutely fantastic.

The poem starts beautifully on a calm note and gracefully goes on to the next stanzas. And it all ends with perfect concluding lines.

Amazing work!

[Laughing Man]

Thanks alot, I am glad you liked it.

[Phonoho]

Nothing overtly philosophical reveals itself to me. It seems the author is merely waxing poetic about nature and her most glorious season, which is a good enough topic for a poem. As a nature piece this is sublime, but to be philosophical I need a bit more to show me how the speaker aligns himself with the imagery instead of being a mere observer.

[Vorcla]

Nicely done; very pastoral, great imagery and use of language. I agree with Phon, though - I don't know if I'd call it philosophical. That's not a criticism - it's great - but maybe it should be in a different category.

[Laughing Man]

Alright lol...ill have someone move it to nature.