[spinx]

A person with nothing
to say is a person I
do not want to be

To not have a single
thougt would make
me feel lost

No conversation would
drive me insane

To never hear voices
would make me
distraught

As no one would
care where the
world was as there
would be no one to
tell stories all
year around

There would be no
music because
no one could tell if it
was any good

We would all be
zombies doing
no good

Where would the world
be if we all didn't say
anything

There would be a hell
of alot of peace on earth
if you should ask me

[Natalya L]

I agree with the last stanza.

[kayzee]

Just noticed a typo in the second stanza ( thougt).
not too bad of a poem but i cant help but feel it lacks something- but i like the last to stanzas.

A poem I think a lot of us can relate to. I'm not too sure what pattern you had with separating the sentences onto different lines but I think it works in this context. Almost like it's in your head, where things are never structurally sound, all kind of floating around in no particular order. It's like you've resolved this by writing it down...that's my way of looking at it, I have know idea if that's the case

but it's good anyway

dunc

[Syrah]

I think there is like a stanza or two missing within the piece. The natural flow is generally a neatly unique structure of thought, but some of the overall thought skips around a bit. With a stanza or a couple, it might hone the thought so that it is a little more pregressive. I find this ambitious and anything ambitious automatically gets marks in my book

[solidsnakebite]

Cool poem. I think that this is one of those poems where the idea overshadows everything else. I found myself just reading it- not caring about flow or any other technicallities. I don't know wether that is a good thing or bad. I enjoyed it though.

[spinx]

thanks everone for your input