[Rolling Pichu]

The winds of crimson caress were once wandering unsold,
I looked upon the deeds of men, and laughed at legends told.
I laid beneath my bitter will, aside the means of death,
my shame was not on trial, for I struggled with a breath.

Against me talked of gates found close, those far to be decreed:
"The foolishness of years began once those whose shadows bleed.
They speak of glory after labor, and deities voice these rights:
'Shall anyone ignore one fate, will sleep a million nights.'"

And before the sand colossus, where the arid scene is keen,
to wash our lust, the sun cascades amidst the desert screen.
For decades' time I stole a prayer to be granted unprofaned,
will dreams before me sing a lullaby of tunes unchained?

That dream ignores the fateful truth, we scattered tender prose;
for which we must be one again, this beast will nations doze,
And overcome a trial, as that martyrdom behind;
to seal our sinful proof, between fools or mere mankind.

Author's note: There's nothing really definite as a motif behind this poem, it's just what I'd call a jam.

[Lubesh]

Excellent jam...I was quite happy sifting thru trying to find one then gave up and enjoyed the ride! Mesmorising words.

[spinx]

very good poem, i enjoyed reading it.

[RENA HANDS]

Impressive, simply a superb creation.
Question: did u want to leave the last sentence without a period?
You gave punctuation to the other sentences, simply curious.

'Shall anyone ignore one fate, will sleep a million nights'"

[Rolling Pichu]

Originally Posted by RENA HANDS

Impressive, simply a superb creation.
Question: did u want to leave the last sentence without a period?
You gave punctuation to the other sentences, simply curious.

Must have missed it, really. Thanks everyone for the comments and critique. ^^

[a&Ω]

Awesome. It flowed really well.

[Rolling Pichu]

I'm easy with the flow, always, It's something I've never have had trouble with. I'm also really strict when it comes to metric, so it's natural to expect works with good rhythm and flow from me, since I don't conclude work until I get it straight and easy.

Thanks!