[Venomous Vixen]

Imposter hair
Platinum blonde
Silicone inflation
Altered "10"

Smokey eyes,
Another disguise
Ignoring everything
That's inside

Dolled up depression
In designer clothes
Narcissistic suppression
Hiding everything within

See through platforms
Tread the outside
Imprisoned in skin
Until worlds collide

False advertisement
Bodily alterations
Scalpel's dream
Reality locked within

Scared little girl
Playing dress up
Exploiting and avoiding
Childhood dreams

Cellophane surface
No one acts that well
No amount of change
Will mend what's inside

[Lubesh]

Yep, It's like don't read the label these days.....and all too familiar message always ignored out of desperation.....some good stuff in there.

[Corneac]

Nice poem Bri. Very well done, you manage to optimise the poetry with so little words, that's why I think your so adept at the 55's This was very well done, almost socio-political. Strong, truthful poetry. Fantastic.

Cellophane surface
No one act’s that well
No amount of change
Will mend what’s inside

Does acts need an apostrophe?

Loved it.

[Venomous Vixen]

Thanks you two... and for catching my typo corn

[Vail]

Okay.. I can tell this was written awhile ago, and I know you brought this to my attention the other day, so I'm going to go ahead and give it a review, just for you! (I rhymed)

Speaking of rhyming, you would have to know that I'm going to say your rhyming was sporadic. At first I thought you had a hidden pattern of sorts with the way you were rhyming, which, as much as I hate rhyming, totally gave me an idea for a cool way to do a poem. But alas, there was no hidden pattern to the rhyming, it was just random, and mostly unnecessary. Aside from the random rhyming in your first couple of stanzas, your word choice was superb. I didn't like the last line in your first stanza, I think that could be changed around a bit and still have the same idea conveyed. I'm not saying it didn't fit, but it kind of has a finality to it. Like it's an end of the poem line, not a first stanza, last line kind of line...

My favorite line by far was 'Scalpel's dream' awesome line, again, because it's slightly abstract, and because it forces you to think. It's very intelligent, as much of the piece is. Like lots of my works, this one needs a little TLC. I don't know if this poem has the potential to be great, I doubt it does, but you could definitely fix this up into good. Like if you were putting together a book of poems, this would definitely be somewhere in the middle of the book...

Anyhow, still very well done. Thanks for sharing.

[Venomous Vixen]

Haha thanks for that hun, and I will try and get back to this one as well... this was an idea I loved and I would in turn love to perfect.

[Vorcla]

How'd I miss this? Just great, hun. Biting commentary in there with your usual beautiful language. Top notch!

[Venomous Vixen]

Thanks This one needs some major TLC though