[Vince]

When China rises form the dead,
democracy will be painted red.
The communistic capitalism of Mao,
the dictatorship you'll never avow.

~II~

If Ulysses was a fascistic force,
democracy would be the Trojan horse.
And if Ithaca was the land of the free,
then blood and tears would be the sea.

~II~

Free speech and humanism, the wild Chimera,
and politics, Bellerophontes of our era.
While Pegasus is state oppression and fear,
I still search the reincarnation of the spear.

[Vince]

Are these offending?

[Ryankia]

Quite the opposite dear. ^.~ Great as always

[Vince]

Well I assumed they were, because the thread had 52 views and not one comment.

Anyways, thank you

[Ryankia]

They are just too great - we feel embarrassed ^.~

[evizaer]

Originally Posted by Vince

When China rises form the dead,
democracy will be painted red.
The communistic capitalism of Mao,
the dictatorship you'll never avow.

From what I've been reading recently, the capitalist influences in china did not become at all prominent until after Mao's death.

I feel like the rhyme in the last line is forced.

~II~

If Ulysses was a fascistic force,
democracy would be the Trojan horse.
And if Ithaca was the land of the free,
then blood and tears, would be the sea.

Get rid of the comma in the last line, it's used incorrectly.

~II~

Free speech and humanism, the wild Chimera,
and politics, Bellerophontes of our era.
While Pegasus is state oppression and fear,
I still search the reincarnation of the spear.[/center][/b][/size][/font]

You completely lost me here. I just don't get the references, which is my fault. It'd be nice if it weren't so opaque...

The biggest flaw is how the lines trip over themselves. The rhythm is all over the place and inconsistent. When I think you are establishing it, it seems to slip away. The little words trip it up a lot.

Why did you number two of the stanzas "II"?

Why do people insist on centering their poems and applying annoying styling to them? I almost feel like I'm in a kindergarten classroom sometimes when I read poetry here. :p

[Vince]

For the first piece, it is true what you said, but Mao did establish communism, (not "pure" communism) and so I believe I can say that China of today is influenced a lot by him.

For the second, thanks for the editing.

For the third you must know the legend of Bellerophontes who seeked Pegasus (a flying horse) in order to fullfil a prophecy that he would kill Chimera (a legendary beast). And he killed it, using his spear. It is kinda opaque, I guess.

The rhytm is incosistent and the flow does kinda suck, I knew that when I was writing them. That's why I put 'em in sociopolitical and not in closed form. The mistake is mine for naming them quatrains.

"II" is used to separate the pieces. As for the centering and the annoying syle I think it's up to the person, 'cause I liked it .

In overall thanks for reading and spending time to comment in so detail.