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15-12-2007, 08:34 AM
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[POTM] Strings
'The tragedy is of little consequence,'
said the puppets on parade. 'The soldiers, not for your defence, are players in our charade. You people scored a substantial defeat in your dire tirade. Now make your bow and please cry out,' said the puppets on parade.
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15-12-2007, 01:36 PM
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Re: Strings
I like this one - strong imagery on your part in a political sense. Of the ones you posted recently, this has to be one of your stronger pieces.
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18-12-2007, 02:26 AM
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Re: Strings
I agree, very strong images. Very subtle and simple, but packed with meaning. Great one, Lubesh.
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20-12-2007, 03:17 AM
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Re: Strings
Thank you both v much.
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06-01-2008, 10:04 PM
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Oh, your a bloody showoff. How you just "churn" these out. I hate you! The similar sounds, and alliteration, assonance/....whatever it's called....makes me so jealous. And the metaphor was brilliant, and how your pulled it of with a touch of dialogue. Short...and packs a punch. awesome! I've missed these....they inspire me....
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07-01-2008, 02:07 AM
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Ah, thanks bunch corneac. What was it star wars said...'use the force..the force lol
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07-01-2008, 02:30 AM
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Re: Strings
A march for marionettes. I have a couple that I built but lost interest before clothing them. This kinda makes me want to get my sewing machine out and dress them up in style. Love the quasi-march rhythm. Nice indeed.
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07-01-2008, 02:33 AM
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WEll, get those boys out! Thanks phonoho.
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08-01-2008, 05:37 AM
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Not sure how I have not commented on this one yet as I have read it half a dozen times. I absolutely loved it. I have to agree with Chris, how the hell do you just spit these out and they are just, bloody perfect. I did wonder about your capitalization though...
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Besides those silly little technicalities, this is sheer brilliance. Man, how I missed it.
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08-01-2008, 11:21 PM
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Yes u r right, no getting away from ur suggestions. maybe i stopped thinking after i ddin't use full on quotes, but nonetheles ur right..have chnaged it thank you!
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10-01-2008, 07:24 AM
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Re: Strings
Yes, a strong poem packed with meaning, and the meaning I infer, leads me to agree that there were indeed, strings attached.
Colin
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10-01-2008, 09:13 AM
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Indeedy! Thanks Colin
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