[Theboss1985]

There is blood on the streets
There is blood on my hands
There is a fear in their eyes
I can’t understand

There’re drowning in tears
From the angels above
I know you can kill for freedom
But would you die for love

I look up to the sky
And there’s nobody there
Tonight the world is down
To one last prayer

Here the only time it rains
Is when angels cry
They say a devil gets his wings
When a good man dies

How many men have to die?
For one man’s greed
I was willing to fight for freedom
But I’m ready to concede

I look up to the sky
And there’s nobody there
Tonight the world is down
To one last prayer

And tonight
We’ll have to pray to empty skies
'Cause one man saw god
In the devil's eyes

He took all that was good
From the ones who care
And now the world is down
To one last prayer

I will fight for peace
I will fight for love
I will fight for the livin’
And the ones above

But I will never kill
For money or greed
You can put the gun in my hand
But I will concede

[Nupur]

Excellent!

There’re drowning in tears

There're isn't an acceptable form. I think you meant They're.

Cause one man saw god

An apostrophe before Cause would be good since it's a short form.

In the devils eyes

devil's. You missed the apostrophe.

I seriously love this poem. The theme, the repetition, it was all carried out to perfection. Your talent as a lyricist is clearly shown here. Terrific work.

[Theboss1985]

Thanks for the edits

[WillFreeman]

All of the stanzas are quatrains except for stanza four. I'm not sure if you meant to do that, but I think you can have "They say a devil gets his wings" in one line and it would still work.

Stanza five I think you meant "fight FOR freedom" not "fight freedom".

When you say "You took all that was good" it implies you are speaking to the "one man". I think it would be more consistent if you were either speaking to him the whole time, or in this case just said "He".

I also think the second to last stanza and the last stanza would be more powerful and purposeful if you used "I will" instead of "I'll".

[Theboss1985]

Thanks for the suggestions

[Vail]

Well boss.. don't know if I've commented on your works before, so I'll give this a go. This was really well done, and had for the most part great flow through the entire piece. The only stanza you really need to doctor up, is your seventh. Your syllable count just cause the reader to throw the e-brake in their mind while reading. It's not a crazy hard fix, I found a solution almost immediately after working it in my head for a minute or two.. again I don't suggest what the author do to a piece so as to not step on their own creativity, but if you wish to know what I'd do, just ask in a PM.

All-in-all good stuff. I'm not quite sure I agree on a whole with the message you're portraying here, but I could nod my head to enough of it that I could enjoy it. Thanks for sharing.