[Reik Mohican]

You have neglected your duties,
Groundskeeper, Gardener.
You have a name, but it is of little importance;
You are a manifestation of everyone before you.

You have neglected your duties;
You have forgotten to tend to the yard.
The trees have become unsightly.
Their branches extending far beyond where they belong.
The flower beds have lost their luster;
The pedals have wilted without your constant care.

The lawn however, is more beautiful than ever;
Each strand of grass its own length.
Swayed by rebellious winds,
Six billion blades stand raised against you

[Rakkasan]

What a grand foray into the world of poetry. I'm glad to see you are expanding your writing experiences. This is a nice bit of work you have here, and so appropriately catagorized.

Only a couple of things to bear in mind.

Originally Posted by Reik Mohican

The trees have become unsightly.
Their branches extending far beyond where they belong.

The second line quoted here is an incomplete sentence. You can correct it by either replacing the period in the first line with a comma, or by droping the "-ing" from "extending".

Originally Posted by Reik Mohican

The lawn however, is more beautiful than ever;
Each strand of grass its own length.
Swayed by rebellious winds,
Six billion blades stand raised against you

There seems to be a comma missing after "lawn", and a period at the very end.

Great work; nice subject. You have handled it well. I can hardly wait to see what more you bring us. Keep pushing yourself.

[Reik Mohican]

Thanks for all of your help in getting this into posting condition. I'm looking forward to writing more to see if I;m any good at this poetry stuff .

[RENA HANDS]

Impressive! This is extremely graphic and you’re able to get across your Socio-Political view…

Six billion blades stand raised against you

I rate 4/5!

[Peppy]

If I were grass, I'd be crab grass. Yok, yok, yok. I'll put my lame joke aside and comment properly.

Now this I like. I can interpret anyway I can. The Depression, War, etc., these can all go into the light of this poem. I enjoyed this poem. I enjoyed the "Groundskeeper, Gardener." symbolism involved.

Pretty good entry, Reik.

[Vorcla]

Nice symbolism. You gotta be careful with a poem like this that it doesn't become too heavy handed. You managed to skirt that problem. Your imagery and metaphors are fairly well crafted. Nice job, and please keep at it.

[MindsEye]

I've said it before and I will say it again "I'm a sucker for great use of alliteration". I find it refreshing to come back in after a while and discover work like this. Your subtle progression towards a deeper meaning is like a keen magician's slight of hand.

Keep up the great work.