[MindsEye]

Falling through my fingers,
dusty drifting,
In a daze of dismay;
Sound and deafening to my eyes.

Could there not be
a more sturdy monologue,
of might and mayhem,
Razing so many souls?

The collision of those sought,
filling their fancy of flight,
and forthcoming failure;
a façade has forded the field.

Windows once peered through
peerlessly, pose precariously,
as people pause in penance;
Yet pain has passed to passion.
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I wrote this poem sometime around 11 Sep 02 so you can guess at the topic. The part that was strange to me and totaly unintentional was how the first letter of each stanza in reverse order and the first word of the poem form W-T-C-Falling.

[Lubesh]

The gradual seepage of illiteration made this for me...a dusting i thoguht then got to the crescendo..The alst line, lighened the heavy tone with still a depth.

[Rakkasan]

Love the theme, and even some parts within it; however, overall, I didn't enjoy it very much. The alliteration seemed way too forced, sometimes pushing good thoughts aside for the sake of itself.

Of course, that doesn't mean it's bad - I just didn't get into it like some of your other writings.

BTW, you're not in the military anymore, so it's okay to say Sep. 11, 2002. It took me a long time to break that habit, and I have a friend that was discharged in '78 that still writes his dates that way. It's always a dead give-away for spotting current and former military personnel.

[RENA HANDS]

Being that I too am playing with alliterations at this time, I must say…

I LOVE the repetition. The image you have conveyed with your vocabulary is extraordinary! I will rate for whatever my ratings are worth…5/5!