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29-01-2006, 05:11 AM
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I Pledge Allegiance
I pledge allegiance to the United States,
Where freedom rings, yet there is still hate, And to the republic of violence and control, The government who can't take the role, Of fighting for the shootings in D.C., Happening every day, yet they never speak faithfully, They are focused on other countries when they should focus on our own, We need our own help, we need a new tone, A tone for justice to be served, No matter what say the guilty one's words, One nation, under God, indivisible, Where worker's voices are invisible, And education and schools are being replaced, Soon they will be gone and completely erased, With liberty and justice for all, We can only wonder when the frauds of crime will fall...
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho 
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30-01-2006, 05:49 PM
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Re: I Pledge Allegiance
Nice! I'd salute that sooner than singing along to the traditional anthem.
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05-02-2006, 10:24 AM
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I love it - I have the same opinion, Kat. My elementy school shut down. I was in the last 5th grade class. The goverment isn't treating tomorrow's citizens correctly!
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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06-02-2006, 09:29 AM
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Oh yeah. I really don't like what the government is doing right now, especially Bush. He started the whole war w/ Iraq, and I don't get it. I just wish that everything would be peaceful...
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho
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06-02-2006, 11:23 AM
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yeah, I agree. but like the bible says, "there will always be wars, and talk of war".
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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06-02-2006, 11:15 PM
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I believe that there was a saying that went, "Without war, order wouldn't exist."
Anyway, I loved the message that the poem was ringing out, but I didn't like the way the stanzas were set up. It may be that I'm not used to the unbalanced number of sylables in a rhyming poem, but I would suggest that it be put it in the form of the pledge itself to mock this injustice a little more. All in all, this was an excellent poem.
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The oldest and strongest emotion of mankind is fear. The oldest and strongest fear is fear of the unknown. -H.P. Lovecraft
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07-02-2006, 12:32 PM
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It's not so much I hate Bush, it's that I don't like the way he's doing things.
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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10-02-2006, 05:55 AM
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Exactly, BW.
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho
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27-02-2006, 10:29 PM
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Quote:
Before he walked into the lampost.
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28-02-2006, 02:21 AM
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Watch your words, Homeland Security is watching you..
/Har Har. //I wish that wasnt funny.
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Wise men speak because they have something to say, fools speak because they have to say something. -Plato
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28-02-2006, 11:05 AM
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lol - u can't say what u want anymore... with out being caught!!!!! lol
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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01-03-2006, 07:11 AM
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it's not so much that i want to kill bush, it's that i dont want him to be living any more. lol. nice poem, nice msg too.
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01-03-2006, 09:18 AM
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Thanks for the comments!
Gosh, what's with that listening into people's phone call thing? GEEZ! HELLO! Ever heard of privacy!
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho
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01-03-2006, 11:34 AM
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it's called the last president caught doing that sort of thing quit before he was impeached!!!!!!!!!!
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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14-03-2006, 06:24 AM
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Yeah! Geez, he's trying to give himself more power when it's not right! I'm in government right now, and we just studied the Constitution. And I tell you, there is nothing in there that gives him the right to listen in on people's conversations.
Oh, and I was voting for Kerry to win in '04 all along. LONG LIVE KERRY!
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho
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14-03-2006, 07:52 AM
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lol, agreed.
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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14-03-2006, 07:52 AM
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it's not that I hate Bush, it's that I hate what he is doing...
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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18-03-2006, 10:31 AM
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Ya. Besides, he's old and gray.
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"We discover that all the poems and stories we've been posting either need commas, or don't have enough. I call her The Comma Fairy..." ~Phonoho
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18-03-2006, 11:41 AM
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have u noticed that all our prez's have been old white guys?! lol
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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06-04-2006, 05:29 AM
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