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Our Soul's Dance
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13-09-2007, 06:15 AM
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Our Soul's Dance
Beat within me
Thumps in tune Boom, boom Rhythm courses through Molding my spirit Lost in movement Mesmerized Hypnotized Flowing with emotion Boom, boom I lead, I follow Rise and fall Feet inside, glide Into the unknown Boom, boom Reverberating sounds Knock against me Vibrating Hydrating The thirst within Boom, boom Symphony of life Dazzles walls within Concert hall of wonder Hold this tiny dancer Spotlight shines Boom, boom Never still Until my time Guiding Sliding Spiraling within Boom, boom Can you hear it? Dance with me Exchange my heart With yours Boom, boom Carry me Spin and twirl Endlessly Taking Making Two become one Boom, boom Orchestra is fading Darkness closing in Boom, boom Hand in hand We still dance Slowing Knowing The end is near Together we move One last time In tune Boom, boom
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13-09-2007, 11:39 AM
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Re: Our Soul's Dance
I loved the quickening near the middle end then slowng again tothe more sombre. The hydrating and thirst re emoton was nicly done and wth ths i could envsage lots of setting/dances or even no dance at all!
Had another 'boom' thought lke a spotlighted ballroom...boom...step..boom lol
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16-09-2007, 09:39 PM
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Ah man...you've grown so much - your writing I mean. It's great. This piece, just breaths originality. And it's long (which I love), and a great use fo diction. Enjoyed this one a lot.
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17-09-2007, 05:12 AM
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Re: Our Soul's Dance
Thank you both
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