[Syrah]

Break,
Shattered emotions
Lain upon bloody glass

Stark,
Naked vulnerability
Exposed to scrutiny

Mark,
Frailty charcoaled
Upon stripped skin

Hark!
Exhibition rifling
Of deep pettiness

Spark,
Modification of self
Degradation and revaluation

Lark,
Unto lustrous night
To unforeseen wonder

[Lubesh]

Ouch sy am old u know...the font is awfullol

[Syrah]

Break,
Shattered emotions
Lain upon bloody glass

Stark,
Naked vulnerability
Exposed to scrutiny

Mark,
Frailty charcoaled
Upon stripped skin

Hark!
Exhibition rifling
Of deep pettiness

Spark,
Modification of self
Degradation and revaluation

Lark,
Unto lustrous night
To unforeseen wonder

[Syrah]

better????

[Lubesh]

ur being funny now right?lol

Ilikethat. Like ur own lexicon using more than bland descriptions but with self inerpretaton or that of the poet. the first verse has to be my favourite forgood useage.

I tried to make sense ofthe itemisedbut found nothing maybe cosits you i thought another meaning or mesage maybe there..but good piece allin all.

[Syrah]

I'm not sure what you just said, but there is a message to the piece... (if you were saying you didn't find one)

[Lubesh]

Originally Posted by Syrah

I'm not sure what you just said, but there is a message to the piece... (if you were saying you didn't find one)

Sorry, I was looking for except the main point alink between the actual headers of each verse..which is what Imeant..cryptic or somehting, I maybe tired lol