Hot - like Summer itself. A bit of a departure for you, Austin, and it's always good to stretch out. The metaphorical heat combines with the actual heat of summer, and then the contrast at the end with "shivering" kind of pulls everything together. You have excellent control of your word choices and the way you write, and it shows here. Nice job.
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"I wanted revenge - whenever somebody kills me, I tend to get a little upset..."
I think the minimalism works, really. I can't really comment about the mechanics of the poem, because I'm lousy at all that, but I think your imagery works really well. I like the title a lot because it really really fits in with the content of the poem.
I went through it again to try and pick my favourite line(s), and I really couldn't. It's really all good.
__________________ And everybody's got a right to a will to want to live
And a right to want to die
Very well written........there are alot of good writers here and you are definitely on eof them.......holding back here gave it a certain thrust
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I created the sound of madness, wrote the book on pain and yet, I'm still here to explain.
That the darkest hour never comes in the night, you can sleep with a gun....but when ya gonna wake up and fight.......for yourself -Shinedown
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