[Corneac]

In r a i n b o w
colour is

sectioned
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seperated
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segmented
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segregated

reflecting/gnitcelfer

h
uma
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n
a
tttttttt
u
r
e

so that even the essence of
light

remains...

isolated

exclusive

f

a

l

l

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g

a.......................c..... ....................c......... ..................r........... ...............o.............. ................s............. ..................s

the sky in
p i e c e s

calling....

[Ryankia]

Very night Corn. Perhaps "light" shouldn't be so light. Didn't know it said "light" until I highlighted it, yet I love the concept and the structure of the piece. Very creative!

[dearest]

Oh, very creative. Love the cleverness of falling actually
f
a
l
l
i
n
g.
Among other things, of course. Great work.

[Laughing Man]

Damn...you took my form to a new level of crazyness.

[Lubesh]

Crazy but colourful!

[Hirak]

!! Poetry is an art, but this art is poetry..? Oh yes, the form is closed

[Eva Marie]

I like how it flows.

[x_lovely09]

Nice use of text format in the poem :]] love!

[Vorcla]

Whoooooo! Nice job, Chris! How long did it take you to set that up? Great content, too.

[in_absentia]

What more can one say? I'm completely enamored with this piece.

[RENA HANDS]

Well this is definitely something new to these old eyes.

I loved reflecting/gintcelfer. I do hope that I rewrote that properly.

At first and four reads I thought “what the?” Then read five, seven more times more and thought brilliant. For me personally I think putting the dialogue/speech into quotations wouldn’t have hurt the form either. It might even give something even more dramatic. But of course this is only one opinion.

[Corneac]

Thanks all! I'm nto sure what went through me...but yeah...random is fun...

[Nupur]

haha..i was thinking about e e cummings too when i read this.

agree with tricia. 'falling' is ingenious.

really good work chris.

[Corneac]

Hahaha...thanks! I rather like it, nto really poetry, but a bit of fun.

[MindsEye]

I have always liked the use of word placement and sculpting in poetry. I feel it takes it to a new level. It does not always work well but in this case you have captured the essence of the subject with brilliant technique and creativity. You have nice imagery paired with a wonderful sense of connection, despite the fleeting nature of the subject. Great work.

[Corneac]

Thanks Mindeye! Your comments are very helpful, and it's great to see some frsh faces around here commenting. Cheers mate!

[Peppy]

Hahaha, now that was very creative. I couldn't take my eyes off it. As the others said, it was crazy, too.

Pretty cool.

[Corneac]

Thanks Pep!