[Rudy]

I am unpredictable, highly retributive,
and prone to violence in the most historical of ways.
I am death itself.
I am a shadow that descends on a soft spring evening,
I cannot be prevented.
I make absolutely no sense,
but you will feel me for a long time.
Be kind to me, for I am a ghost.
I am the voice of a lonely evening wind.

[Lubesh]

A tip is it isnt alwasy pleasing to have double line spacing in poetry and not the norm also apart from the spacing error between comma and word you can afford to make two lines of this..and lose the straggly line also not acceptable practise.

I am unpredictable,highly retributive, and prone to violence in the most historical of ways.

Let me know when you have edited and I can post it.

[RENA HANDS]

Bravo!

I have no new words to describe your greatness, so I shall instead give you a 4/5 rating!

[DarkPhoenix]

I liked it... Dark and it felt as though death was a being with utter lonliness