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Hide and Seek Part III
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09-05-2008, 11:35 PM
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Hide and Seek Part III
part three
“Here I am, my sweet,” Speaks a voice through the wall “I’m hoping that you’re done," "Cause ready or not, here I come.”
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Concentrating on something is simply a small factor that deals with focusing. To truly focus on something, you must understand how that something works from the inside view of it. Last edited by Nupur; 20-05-2008 at 02:04 AM. 
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13-05-2008, 02:39 AM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
Nice sweet end to the series. Again, a few suggestions:
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13-05-2008, 05:49 AM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
Thank you, I thought it was.
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23-05-2008, 02:28 AM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
Short, captivating, and a good way to end the series. And "Here I come" was a terrific ending obviously. And if people don't understand why they need to learn how to play Hide and Seek
 . Good job, Alex. Great way to end a good series of poems.
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24-05-2008, 02:41 PM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
Thank you.
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25-05-2008, 10:52 AM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
Will there be more? Or does it end here?
If it concludes here, then I will ‘who has come? For me there’s seems to be missing emotions/actions… I will not rate this Part Three until you explain if there will be more?
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25-05-2008, 02:32 PM
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Re: Hide and Seek Part III
I'm not sure if there will be any more hide and seek ones, kind of saw it as a trilogy and abruptly ended it here. Would be kinda hard to continue.
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