[maxaynjj]

Who are you?
Not a scholar of Literature
Not a graduate of higher learning
What are you trying to do?

Do you think these scraps will fly?
Babblings from your mind
It is not as sharp as mine
I have a degree
Why do you think you can be better than me?

Too much rhyme!
No, no, no
You are no poet
Go back and finish College
Try back then
After maybe a poet you may be

Still here?
Now I must say to you
Go away
Remove yourself from my presence
Take these with you

At home to the computer
The Internet
A faithful friend
Click, click, click
Time goes on and flies by
Click, click, click
Two million hits

The phone
Ring ring, ring ring
Hello
Yes so sorry about before
But I was in haste
Can we meet?
At your leisure
Of course, of course
How much do you want for them all?
An offer for your art!

[Vail]

As much as I want to review this.. your negative tones throughout, and your feeling of superiority that are displayed within the work really turn me off from the whole piece... Meh..

I will give it a review, whateva... Okay.. free form at it's best.. not saying it's a good write, just saying it is completely free form. I thought you were going with a pattern adding one more line to each additional stanza... but that idea was shredded... maybe not a bad idea if you ever consider to rework this. Ummm.. your capitalization is off in certain lines... I really shouldn't judge this as I have done it myself in the past, I don't know if you're trying to bring emphasis to the words (which subconsciously is probably what you are doing) but I feel the urge to point it out as incorrect form nonetheless.

And now I must apologize as a complete idiot.. I didn't realize that the perspective was first from an editor to an aspiring writer... I caught that much better through about my fifth reread of it.. again, I will not erase my ignorance of this point from the beginning of this review. It only goes to prove that that tone is hard to catch on your first couple of reads.. I would recommend trying to strengthen that tone a little bit or maybe shed a little more light on whom is speaking, I'm not suggesting a font change, as I hate that, but maybe a few more clues littered throughout the work.. Meh... Thanks for sharing, not a bad write.

[maxaynjj]

Hi Vail, I wrote this poem in order to inspire and create an awareness of ones actions. Meaning, I wanted those who read the poem and are aspiring writers to be encouraged, not to give up if turned down. I also wanted any editors or publishers to be more mindful of their own actions when considering a writers work because in this day and age you never know who will sell and who will not. It is not meant to be an angry piece and it is not intended to lash out at anyone, as I have never experienced this myself. The mere fact that you felt as strongly as you did gives me encouragement because the whole point of me writing poetry is to obtain a reaction, an emotion from the reader, good, bad or indifferent. I achieved my goal, you felt something and it was strong enough to compel you to critic my work and that is the point of poetry for me.

I appreciate your comments and look forward to having you critic me again.

[Ryankia]

I loved this! Definitely motivating for myself, as I am one of those writer's without a college degree (though I would like to get one).

Great job!

[dearest]

Good, and an interesting perspective. However, I really wish you would have stayed with the 'adding one line to each stanza' idea you started with in the first three stanzas. Because, unintentional or not, I loved it. ^_^ Great free form piece, and a nice, enjoyable read. Lovely.

[Jayna]

This is a masterpiece! I feel that you wanted to tell the world that you are a writer and Damn proud of it. No matter what anyone says, I feel that this poem is perfect. It is well written and it has excellent form and rhythm. I know at times people feel that they are better then others but we are all still just humans Take that scholars of Literature everywhere!