[Johnny_beatz]

The drop of a knife
a blow of the wind
all seams sew strife
tears unable to mend
she ended his life
twas unseen end

-billy rhodes (me) 9:04pm 2/7/08

[Johnny_beatz]

It could be longer huh?

[Phonoho]

all seams sew strife

Good line!
I wouldn't chance it; there's enough substance here. To add more content would run the risk of losing your intended motion. I like to allow a piece to propel itself and find its own end.

[Johnny_beatz]

Now that you mention that fact i guess it's fine how it is, I just haven't ever written such a short poem, i guess it was kinda initiation but i felt like i just needed to post something, anything, that poem took maybe 3 minutes at the most, words to rhyme with knife and wind weren't too hard to look for.