[Rain]

When I die I want to hear music
playing gently as my mind fades,
Music to make death less painful,
to ease the experience, to ease my soul.

When I die I want to see a bright light,
so I know I'll be somewhere in peace.
A place where I can rest and be happy,
so that I can watch over friends and family.

When I die I want to be able to smile,
to let all know I'm ok,
that I'm happy,
that I loved life.

When I die I want to take it all in,
take in an experience so captivating.
Realize it and all it's pain,
notice it for it's beauty.

When I die I want to make myself remembered,
write a note or a poem of what it's like,
write in detail of how it feels
to die and to experience the ending.

When I die I want know what time it is,
to know when my time was up.
The excact moment when I was done,
finished, over, completed.

When I die I want to smell flowers.
Smell a fragrance so soft and soothing,
to make my end feel beautiful,
to make the world feel gentle.

When I die I want to take a deep breath.
So I can hold it till I get to the other side,
to enable me to comprehend the whole,
for it's beauty and magnitude.

When I die I want to feel my heart stop,
so then and there I know I'm dead.
That's it's done and I can be calm,
so that I know when I'm truly gone

When I die I want to feel your touch.
Touch me sofly to relax me in my time,
so I know things will be alright,
so I know that everything will be ok.

When I die I want you to kiss me,
because you're my lover and my friend.
To make known that I was loved by you,
to make known what love truly is.

When I die I need you by my side,
to comfort me while I drift away.
So I can die in peace, in harmony,
so that I can die by your side.

[Rain]

Wow, 0 posts, I rule!

[Lubesh]

When I die I want to take it all in,
take in an experience so captivating.
Realize it and all it's pain,
notice it for it's beauty

Wish i'd left my comment now.lol But this was so nciely done a ramble of thoguhts wishes and simple at times then not if u analyse, but plainly shared with us all the same ...a young mans/woman's head and heart at work.very ncie!

[Rain]

yay, thanks Lu.

[in_absentia]

I really liked how seems as if you let the poem take you where it wanted. It gives a good sense of the mentality that is there at the final moments. I do think that you let it run a little too long and you should either tighten the poem up a little bit. At some points, you don't really elaborate on the initial points and I'd really like to see you take things another step further so that the poem is surprising to the reader.

[PaulJJ]

I never wanna die. One of my biggest fears is getting old. lol anyways

I really enjoyed ur poem. I do agree with absentia though that you had let it run 2 long, but at the same time when I got to the end it felt like it was, unfinished. Overall though, nice work.

I’m really enjoying reading your poems!