[Rain]

Underneath the surface,
crawling its way up.
Something is scratching its way out,
something we want to forget.

Both our lives are complicated,
we don't have time to ponder.
This thing will cause trouble,
like it once upon a time did.

Nothing left is to prove,
it'll just make us look like fools.
We'll fight, bicker, and yell.
We'll break down, and cry.

An argument left in the dust,
that once caused us our love.
Regrouped and healed,
it looks to strike again.

Here it comes...

[in_absentia]

I think you could really benefit from reading this poem out loud to yourself. I say that because some parts are wonderful and they just glide off the tongue like they sprayed a line of WD=40 across it. Other parts just feel... dead and lifeless. If you add a syllable here, and take away one there though out your poem (paying attention to how it flows when read aloud) you'll greatly benefit considering you already have a lovely start to the poem.

for example:

Both our lives are complicated,
we don't have time to ponder.
This thing will cause trouble,
like it once upon a time did. <-- this line just gets bogged down because the flow isn't there... but If you change it to "Like once upon a time it did" IMO there is a world of difference to the stanza.

[Venomous Vixen]

I have to agree with the comment above, reading your work back aloud is highly benificial to the overall flow of the piece. I must read mine 10-20 times before posting (with poetry) and at least 2 with prose. It helps you catch those little hiccups, add or remove punctuation and just perfect the piece. One other minor gripe...

Nothing left is to prove,

Nothing is left to prove or Nothing left to prove... the arrangement as is is a bit off.

Other than all of that the content was striking... I enjoyed the feeling of the creepy crawlies, the slight suffocation here... it all fit really well with the overall theme and was delivered just right. Dirty, rotten secrets Well done, hun.

[Rain]

ya know the feeling that after awhile you go back and read something and you completely hate it? Yeah, I have that with this one... thanks for the suggestions guys.