[Rain]

Come to me in your time of need.
I’ll relax you in ways so comforting.
Hold you tight, in the dim light.

Trust me, I’m here to only ease your pain.
I’ll be a friend, because I see you need one.
Let your burdens be free, release them to me.

Cry on my shoulder, it’s alright.
Everything is going to be ok.

[Rain]

I was bored, and this one was simple, simple, and shitty. But I don't care because I liked it for some reason =D.

[Peppy]

I have to say I like it too. It maybe a little cheesy for my taste, but it's pretty good to read. Touching and cheesy, I think would sum up the whole poem.

Don't know what else to say. Shrugs BRB maybe.

[Rain]

It is cheesey, and very poorly written, but, I still posted it for some reason that is unknown to me.

[Venomous Vixen]

I would never call this 'shitty', there is a heartfelt message and a line I absolutely love in there 'let your burdens be free, release them to me'. I agree you could go through and pretty this one up, perhaps with a few synonyms, maybe even more meat of the bones of it, but overall this is far from shitty, in fact, it's rather enjoyable

[Lubesh]

simple yes..we alldo that but gesture and sentiment and feeling..raw and young tender i lvoe this.

[dearest]

Honestly, this isn't bad. Not one of your deeper pieces, but just the same, it expresses valid emotions. Like bri said, you could always come back to this one and add some meat - maybe some metaphor, or shake up the rhyme scheme a little - but for now, it's just fine. I actually rather like this one; the simplicity and sincerity make it seem so relateable.

Cry on my shoulder, it’s alright.
Everything is going to be ok.

Nice job tay

[RENA HANDS]

What about…

Come to you in time(s) of need
comfort you, I will always
In dim light, my arms surround
Trusting always, I’ll ease your pain(s)
In times blindness, I’ll be your friend
Release your burdens, be free

I am never certain of punctuation so I didn't add any. Is this a one time situation or do describe any event of any time? These are as always only my thoughts. I applaud the last stanza. Very graphic and sentimental. I will original idea 4/5!

[MindsEye]

I'm sure we all have those pieces that feel like they just came from nowhere... or that don't measure up to our other works. All of our works have some meaning... and even if it is not to us, someone may find it. Structure is not allways a strong point of some poems and I feel that way about some of mine too, but again technique alone is not a measure of a poems greatness. Honest emotion... the connection between reader and poet... these are factors that weigh the worth of poetry. Simplicity is OK... I personaly enjoyed the little journey that this poem takes you on. Very nice. Another thing about these poems that we write that may not meet our personal expectations... they have usualy for me lead to bigger and better things.