[Corneac]

You’re a little girl
who want to play with the big boys,
And we’ll give you a quarter
if you pull your pants down,

you can call me daddy.
and be my little whore,
and when shit comes to shit,
You’ll be that,
nothing more

but really,
take away the deep voice,
and the commanding tone,
if you give me a quarter
I’ll pull my pants down,

[Venomous Vixen]

a quarter eh? this one is... well, I love the way the tone changes in the end, the anger dissipates and you see there is love there, and in all truth you will swallow your pride for that. It is angry and vengeful and also loving and touching. For such a short piece I applaud you on that alone. Comb through this, there are a few missing letters and what not.

[Hazel]

Personally, I didn't find the tone at the end to be loving, or showing the willingness to swallow pride for the girl. To me it seemed like a quiet, inward admission of blatantly using the girl despite knowing 'he' was no better. He had the same flaws he condemned her for, but was just better at making that into a strategy to trap her. But I did like the raw emotion evoked in this poem, and the way you twisted the mindset. Nicely written.

[Nupur]

This is good stuff! Some "nice" thoughts in there, put forward very well. The flow was really good, specially in the second stanza (that's my favourite one BTW).

you can call me daddy.
and be my little whore,
and when shit comes to shit,
You’ll be that,
nothing more

Loved everything in this one. The penultimate line of this stanza looks a little choppy, thought that might have been intentional considering the transition of thoughts. However, I suggest you to add an 'and' right before the last line. It flowed better that way when I read it.

Good work, Chris! That's why I dig your poetry. Your themes always blow me away. You always have something new. Love this one.