[Lubesh]

I do love you now
I do love you then
And when I reach there
It will be when
My heart cries for more
My heart cries for your
And when they reach here
That will be when
In a breath of an eye
In a blink of a sigh
And when tears merge there
It is now when
If love is a race
If love is a pace
I reach where
It will be won again then

[psycosis]

A little odd and uneven to me but I think that is just me....lol......I liked the wording and the content..... Im gonna put the oddness on me cuz you have always made me expand to understand your writing.....That is the best thing about having so many writers with different styles all in one place.........good job lube

[Bluejay]

This one reminds me a bit of those songs that hover away from the "root" chord, dancing on 7ths and minors and other exotic blends, with perpetual tension, until finally in the end it settles and hits that satisfying chord and you go "Ahhh!"
(And even then, the little "then" on the end that almost robs it.)

A "clever little ditty", with some nice sentiment behind it as well.

[Lubesh]

Thank you.....i takethat after advisement as a compliment....you should write limericks ....lol

[Lubesh]

Thank you Pys....welcome back! but consider i can and do write bollocks and accidental good bollocks - thing is i see it.....whatever anyone else sees gets is another plus and worth it all so TY